I have read now over a hundred chapters to this point and here are some reasons why I think this could be something for you as well. 1) You like transmigration stories with the proven concept of a not weak Mc having an adventure in another world, that you’ve read a thousand times but still can’t get enough off..(like myself) 2) You DON‘T want your Mc to be a teenager in heat yet having some girls around him only only one true future wife. 3) Potentially some kingdom building in the later chapters. 4)Not to many grammar or spelling errors per chapter. To my knowledge you will spot some here or there but they aren’t that often. Make sure you mark them and inform the author, because he earned it writing for free for us. And here some points I’d like to point out that I think the author could improve. 1) Stop using Japanese terminology in an English story. This is sloppy writing in my opinion and also asks for trouble when your reader isn’t familiar with it. 2) Over use of something-cum-something. I know this isn’t necessarily wrong but to my knowledge so far this is sparely used . „cum“ is Latin for with and hence you will find this normally with special terminology like „summa cum laude“. So this begs the question why not simply using with instead of cum and secondly it seems to me unnecessary in most cases. If you are in a bar or caffe you don’t need to know that they also have a dance floor ... caffe-cum- dance floor or better a caffe with dance floor. 3) Some characters could have more depth to them, especially those around the Mc. But I’m aware that this is easier said than done, and also would require even more time in an good paced story. I only want to note that it seems obvious that besides the main protagonists not much to the inner or outer conflicts of his closest allies is actually known. It’s a bit like scratching on the su***ce and I think it’s lost potential... potentially ;)
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I'll keep those suggestions in mind! If others don't mind for filler chapters...I've actually written plenty chapters in the side-charas perspectives, but I've been holding out on them just to keep my pacing consistent...not to mention some of those 'filler' chapters tend to go for a couple of chaps...why? I'm not sure myself lol xD
Well it always depends on the writing style. Fillers and info dumps are more often than not something that’s useful for the writers thought process but not so much for the story‘s development. They are called fillers for a reason ;)
xxAlter:I'll keep those suggestions in mind! If others don't mind for filler chapters...I've actually written plenty chapters in the side-charas perspectives, but I've been holding out on them just to keep my pacing consistent...not to mention some of those 'filler' chapters tend to go for a couple of chaps...why? I'm not sure myself lol xD
I hear ya xD
KingGeorg:Well it always depends on the writing style. Fillers and info dumps are more often than not something that’s useful for the writers thought process but not so much for the story‘s development. They are called fillers for a reason ;)
Ya know I have no idea how many stories I dropped because of cringey out of place japanese words and honorifics.
To be fair he stopped doing it so he took it to heart.
Akabane:Ya know I have no idea how many stories I dropped because of cringey out of place japanese words and honorifics.
Thanks for letting me know,, if not for you mentioning it I might of skipped over this one.
KingGeorg:To be fair he stopped doing it so he took it to heart.
I want to know if there is harem, because I don’t really like harem.
xxAlter:I'll keep those suggestions in mind! If others don't mind for filler chapters...I've actually written plenty chapters in the side-charas perspectives, but I've been holding out on them just to keep my pacing consistent...not to mention some of those 'filler' chapters tend to go for a couple of chaps...why? I'm not sure myself lol xD
Well, it does get a harem. Nothing big tho, just that MC gets 2 wives. I won't consider adding in anyone else cuz its a hassle to write something like that. I'm not into harems myself and the only reason I added in the extra girl was becuz I enjoyed her character and wanted to give her a bigger role in the story rather than just killing her off later.
OneShotKilla:I want to know if there is harem, because I don’t really like harem.
