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Acortal
AcortalLv54yr
2020-03-09 21:37

a lot of fun and i want to see where the story will go next,the author and the story have both improved a lot since the beginning so i have high expectations

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xxAlter
xxAlterAuthor

Thanks you! It's my first book so I'm glad to know that I've indeed improved! I'll continue improving and give you guys an awesome story to look forward to! XD

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KingGeorg
KingGeorgLv14

I have read now over a hundred chapters to this point and here are some reasons why I think this could be something for you as well. 1) You like transmigration stories with the proven concept of a not weak Mc having an adventure in another world, that you’ve read a thousand times but still can’t get enough off..(like myself) 2) You DON‘T want your Mc to be a teenager in heat yet having some girls around him only only one true future wife. 3) Potentially some kingdom building in the later chapters. 4)Not to many grammar or spelling errors per chapter. To my knowledge you will spot some here or there but they aren’t that often. Make sure you mark them and inform the author, because he earned it writing for free for us. And here some points I’d like to point out that I think the author could improve. 1) Stop using Japanese terminology in an English story. This is sloppy writing in my opinion and also asks for trouble when your reader isn’t familiar with it. 2) Over use of something-cum-something. I know this isn’t necessarily wrong but to my knowledge so far this is sparely used . „cum“ is Latin for with and hence you will find this normally with special terminology like „summa cum laude“. So this begs the question why not simply using with instead of cum and secondly it seems to me unnecessary in most cases. If you are in a bar or caffe you don’t need to know that they also have a dance floor ... caffe-cum- dance floor or better a caffe with dance floor. 3) Some characters could have more depth to them, especially those around the Mc. But I’m aware that this is easier said than done, and also would require even more time in an good paced story. I only want to note that it seems obvious that besides the main protagonists not much to the inner or outer conflicts of his closest allies is actually known. It’s a bit like scratching on the su***ce and I think it’s lost potential... potentially ;)

LegolasGreenleaf
LegolasGreenleafLv15

I am caught up at around chapter 250 just for reference sake on how far I read which is up to date at this moment. First the world is interesting and has plenty to be explored which is a big plus as it helps keep me motivated to keep reading when stories have an interesting world where I am constantly wanting to learn more of the world the mc is in. The characters are enjoyable especially the mc family and close friends. Though I will say some dislike some characters or character traits which is understandable as everyone has their own taste. The stuff that I saw some not like was the mc being dense on love(though at least it made sense cause of age/upbringing) which can be frustrating but this novel is one of the few that actually develops the mc where they grow as right now the mc is way more aware and is maturing well. I mostly just dislike an mc who would remain dense when they are an ***** or it lasts too long which doesn’t happen here. The love interest is violent at times at the start like pinching the mc or wanting to hit him which it wasn’t enough where I had issues with it as they are kids so it made sense as they would have a hard time expressing themselves but it may also be because I am used to similar stuff from anime. Though again character development happens so these negative traits for some decrease later on as they grow out of them. I really like authors who do character development at a good enough pace like showing gradual changes versus some novels I like that will unfortunately keep a dense mc for example and never get rid of it just to continue a joke which has long since got old. The story overall was just fun to read and from my experience the quality is above average vs other novels here and in my opinion one of my favorites. Also probably one of the biggest things is I like the author’s attitude on how they always come off as being friendly and takes criticism well which is something that is needed if one wants to improve. There isn’t much criticism in this review as I just enjoyed the read so far and the flaws are all things that is fixed with editing which don’t occur hardly at all. If I have criticism I mostly write it when I notice it at the comments unless it is bad enough where I can remember it then it goes into the review. Good start especially for the first book and I look forward to future chapters along with how the story grows.

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