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2020-04-21 10:16

The book is pretty good, with decent ideas behind the story, however, in execution it comes out somewhat scattershot, with a fairly limited throughline and new concepts and "endgame" entities from the beginning. It doesnt take its time to establish anything, and unfortunately, whether it be due to the translator or the author if this isnt translated, the english is pretty broken, making certain lines somewhat nonsensical and others outright incorrect or very very different to comprehend. Again, great ideas behind the story, but the author needs more practice writing, and if he keeps going with the same quality of ideas behind his writing in future i look forward to his improvements greatly.

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thank you for your honest review. I really agree with you because even I could tell how badly I suck at the first few chapters. But I am just a newb here and still learning a lot. Its an original story and I do everything from outlining, writing, grammar,rewriting and etc. May I know what chapters did you last read?

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I've read up to around chapter 66, and as a word of advice, if you're able to find someone who can help with proofreading for grammar, or if you're really lucky and can find someone with enough time and interest to help you edit and refine your book, it'll definitely help you to lift some of the burden off your back

iamnaz7:thank you for your honest review. I really agree with you because even I could tell how badly I suck at the first few chapters. But I am just a newb here and still learning a lot. Its an original story and I do everything from outlining, writing, grammar,rewriting and etc. May I know what chapters did you last read?
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