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It looked interesting at first, the premise was good, but dulled at the very first arc. The characters are written badly, most of them are no different from the cardboard arrogant young masters. The whole first arc didn't do much other than to show that. "Oh, that character is written to be an a-hole and antagonize the MC, oh this character is another one of those, oh.. a third one right from the get-go?" There's simply something wrong with how the characters are written if they all act the same and give you the same vibe. Being a fan of reincarnation and action genre, the whole academy arc feels significantly lackluster. It lacks that excitement you would typically get from reading stories of similar genre. First arcs should always be interesting as it will show the readers what the novel has in store, making them decide whether it is worth reading or is it simply a waste of time.
Rebirth: The Shadow of Greed
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Work on the strengths of your novel, man. The reincarnation and future knowledge is great. The first thing he did to ensure his safety by taking that disguise skill was great, as is his first fight in his new life, but the excitement kinda stopped after that. Showing that most nobles are incompetent and only have their useless pride, but it shouldn't be the focus, if you focus on those stuffs that is of "negative emotions", balance it out with "positive" ones, otherwise it will be stifling to read for the readers, unless you want it to be extremely dark-themed, of course. It's actually a good thing that you put that guy who defended that man who didn't want to be promoted. Kinda shows some light in the darkness, that not all nobles are d¡cks.
Roughlydone:I appreciate your review, yeah I think so too, being the first book I've wrote I guess it is too lackluster. Let me work on improving the future chapters.