IOnlyEatDinner
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I was talking about the movie in the gif which was a 2002 movie.
It's a very interesting premise copied from another novel, unfortunately, it's not even close to the original in any way. Character relationships, business competitions, and even regular character interactions appear comical. Sometimes they would appear exaggerated or brain dead for what seems to be an attempt to be funny or a poor attempt at painting a character in a bad light. Unfortunately, for a genre that is more grounded to realism, it takes from the immersion and lowers the quality of the story. What a story like this needs is a thrilling competent competitions, not some third-rate cardboard villain that you know will fail from the start. Another thing a story like this needs is proper interactions from people around him and reactions from the people influenced/touched by his games, directly or indirectly. Not some side-comments about MC's arrogance over and over like they don't have anything else to comment on. There's also the a glaring lack of insight for business that is a very important strength of the original. The sequence of events just move on without easing up to it. In the original, we get a proper planning and answers from the MC on business standpoint, whether it be to answer the actions of his also very competent competitions or other entities that are trying to one-up him and/or his business, or an action of necessity due to things actually progressing enough to warrant it or having a very good opportunity to do it. Here? It mostly just happens out of nowhere. Overall, I may be giving a harsh criticism, considering that the original had a very good foundation, and being inspired from it should have at least retained its good quality, unfortunately, I don't see any reason to read this when the quality is very much lower than the original. On a very unprofessional and unfiltered rant, any more of those character dialogues and I'm gonna start having a brain hemorrhage. I seriously can't muster up the strength to read more.
Mora also works as a catalyst for other things (alchemy, forging, etc.) which a fake wouldn't be able to copy, so there's that.
This whole meeting coulda been done in 2 chapters at most. Just how many chapters did it take for this one? It feels like a blatant chapter-count padding.
Writing quality of 3. Many spelling mistakes, grammatical errors, and the like.Story development of 1. Went from interesting gamer dxd fic, into an edgy r*pey fic with unnecessary bashing, one that I never expected considering the early chapters were fine, like what happened? seriously.Character design of 1. If it's a design choice to make the characters' characteristics worse than the original just to justify an edgy event for a seriously increasingly annoying main character, then it is what it is. I just can't justify giving this a higher score.Updating stability of 3, it's not a daily update, but it IS updating. World background of 3, well, it's mostly done well, the author does know the world of DxD, which is why it's frustrating to see characters being butchered for the sake of edgy "character" development, if you can even call it a development.
I see you are a shawarma and bebsi guy, my friend.
Yeah, roundabout nerf. Autocorrect ;-;
Way too fast, man. I get that you're trying to get this development out of the way but rushing it out like this will only leave a bad taste for the readers.
Either this is some kind of bad joke or I'm going to regret wasting my time even reaching this chapter.
Being able to see aptitude alone should have been a very good cheat, unfortunately either the author is needing the MC in a roundabout way by not giving him more opportunities to greatly capitalize on that or the author don't have enough ideas to make the MC capitalize on it, either way, it makes the system look useless and the MC incompetent.
For someone who was already quite old before he died, he sure is very immature. I'm starting to wonder if the author was confused between the 'before' and 'after' transmigration personalities of his MC.
Well, considering there's a route of her which she peacefully coexisted (wink wonk) with Saionji, it should be possible. She has to be utterly neglected for that infamous ending. She's still scary af tho.
The premise was good. The idea of combining pocket hunting dimension and Naruto isn't exactly original but it's an interesting idea. However, the execution is not very good. Too much emphasis on cultivation details that readers needed not to read. It's fine to go through it one time but going over it again and again made the story boring. Okay, we get it, he consumed the orb, he meditated, he grew stronger. Now where is the story? Where this fic fails is making the story engaging. The execution is most of the time cringeworthy too. It's a wish-fulfillment fantasy but unfortunately, the execution made the wish-fulfillment feel like you're reading a teenager's wet dream. The reactions of the characters about everything involving (MC)Naruto are borderline illogical and exaggerated most of the time. Really makes you feel that the characters are lifeless and soulless, they only exist for the sake of (MC)Naruto's gratification.
Maybe from all the chapters til now, we can now agree that this MC is a moron. Not a complete moron but a moron nonetheless. Maybe it's the execution of the story that made him seem that way but I seriously can't convince myself otherwise any longer after all these.
Yep, that's my biggest issue with this story. Sometimes it's justified for him to act in a certain way, but most of the time, it's just for the sake of being edgy. It's hard not to cringe when it's constantly thrown at your face.
A lot of them, actually, for the same reason as Lili.