Review Detail of Dewranko in Rebirth: The Shadow of Greed
Review detail
Its not a bad read per se, but the author needs to go back and edit the chapters. While there are minimal grammatical mistakes, sentence structure and punctuation could use some work. As is, the flow is slightly off and not easy to read. There are also several inconsistencies to do with the main character, namely some small flaws like him behaving like a child instead of an *****, or him knowing stuff that he shouldn't know about. World building is missing a lore to base it on. You are immediately thrown into this world where superpowers exist, but you aren't given any background on the how and why. Granted, this could be solved in the future, but for now it just doesn't seem like it will be the case. Overall 3/5 stars. Author is recommended to go through chapters and edit them again, as well as double checking and editing any future chapters they put out. Author is also recommended to start easing in the lore of the world, and not focus entirely on driving the story and characters forward. You need lore for things to make sense, just like how context is always an important factor in sentences.
Rebirth: The Shadow of Greed
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have you edited it yet ? plus is there anything to do with lightsabers ? front cover looks sick and looks like it does xD
Roughlydone:Hey, thanks for the review, I definitely would go through more editing and yes, I do think I'm not providing more back story and lore. Let me look through and edit it and bring it to a better state :)
The inconsistencies in the earlier parts have been edited, I will not affirm or deny the appearance of lightsabers in the future, but it is set in a post-apocalyptic futuristic setting, so you can't rule it out.
Aeternabilis:have you edited it yet ? plus is there anything to do with lightsabers ? front cover looks sick and looks like it does xD
Will the mc kill bad people? Or is he a person like batman, beat up people but doesn’t cut the loose ends, and i hate that, and in the synopsis it seems like the mc will prevent himself from killing bad people just because he doesn’t want to repeat his past deeds, please tell me, cuz i can’t read a book where the mc doesn’t kill his enemies
Roughlydone:Hey, thanks for the review, I definitely would go through more editing and yes, I do think I'm not providing more back story and lore. Let me look through and edit it and bring it to a better state :)
He will kill people who deserves it. I hate the idea of leaving loose ends. His regaining his humanity is in the terms of friendships and all that that he had missed previously
Ikkarus:Will the mc kill bad people? Or is he a person like batman, beat up people but doesn’t cut the loose ends, and i hate that, and in the synopsis it seems like the mc will prevent himself from killing bad people just because he doesn’t want to repeat his past deeds, please tell me, cuz i can’t read a book where the mc doesn’t kill his enemies
Roughlydone:He will kill people who deserves it. I hate the idea of leaving loose ends. His regaining his humanity is in the terms of friendships and all that that he had missed previously