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Moose_3565
Moose_3565Lv134yr
2020-05-29 09:06

This had potential but unfortunately it just went nowhere with it. Idk if it’s the translation or the author, but the writing just feels kind of empty. Nothing the MC does makes sense, and nothing the other characters do make sense. If you like a story where people either just suck off the MC for everything he does, or are retarded villains who get themselves killed in 2 seconds, then I guess you’d like this. My biggest problem is the story progression just seems so poor. You’ll have half a chapter dedicated to random filler bull**** nobody cares about, then a time skip of 6 months, before throwing some dumb ass situation at the MC where everybody acts like a fucking robot. There are no emotions reading this novel. It is however decent if ur just reading for something to fill time. Don’t expect to enjoy it though.

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Fixten
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Ahaha, my inexperienced self... I want to rewrite it, but it has established and affected the later chapters, so sadly I can't. Anyway, thank you for your review

Moose_3565
Moose_3565Lv13

It definitely has a lot of potential, and writing only gets better with practice. (I know if I tried to write something it’d be extremely awful haha) I still have it in my reading list I’ll probably pick it back up at some point to see how it’s progressing

Fixten:Ahaha, my inexperienced self... I want to rewrite it, but it has established and affected the later chapters, so sadly I can't. Anyway, thank you for your review
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Fixten
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Transported to Another World? Cultivation World? A Modern World? How about mixing all of them? From countless planet in the Universe, Each planet has its own technology, culture, and civilization. There are many plot twists mixed inside where the usual 'Another World' actually holds more mystery. (Writing Quality): I'm not a native English speaker, and revision is under progress. There should be some mistakes left, but it shouldn't be that much. And there should be some cliches that presented in a bad way. It is also under revision. Although I can't completely erase that part cause it might affect the later story. I am rewriting it, so it can at least be presented in a better way. Unfortunately, the revision speed is rather slow since I need to make the new chapter as well. (Stability of Updates): 1 ch/day. But it could be 2 ch/day at weekends or holidays depending on how much time I have on that day. (Story Development): 'This is subjective'. I'm doing my best to present a good story, but it depends on your own preference too. One might say good, and one might say bad. Please don't force your ideal/preferences on this story, if you want the MC this way or the MC that way, you can try to write your own story. All in all, suggestions for a better story would be appreciated. (Character Design): MC has a deep-seated inferiority complex that built up for several years. It will be hard to get rid of all of that, logically. It wasn't something that you can say 'I want to change', and you will change 180 degrees. It will be a slow development of Characters and Personalities. (World Background): The story takes place in multiple world; most of the settings are fictional. If the world background is lacking some details, please do tell me 'which one' and 'what it is' so I can add a little tweaking in that part to make a better world. (Additional Comments): Many good scenes filled my mind that I can't help to write and share it with you all. Although, I know myself wasn't a great writer. I need all possible feedback to learn and improve. For you and me. Disclaimer: I will no longer respond to mean comments and reviews. All opinions are subjective. But, please, be gentle with any strong opinions. It's easy to say something behind a screen, but it can stick with people. Thank you, and I hope you enjoy my novel.

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