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Eternal_Pathfinder
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2020-04-23 17:39

Writing quality: 2 - Author is proficient with middle school grammar. Stability of Updating: 5 - Author updates regularly Story Development: 2 - The MC is an Anti-Sue, no purpose, puppeted by all of the people around him. Author should watch Bad Writing Advice on YouTube. Secondly, set up and pay off for plot points is poorly executed and uninteresting. Character design: 2 - Flat characters that easily break the willing suspension of disbelief. Also, due to the mc being an anti-sue, flat villains turn up everywhere. Not invested in the villains nor the mc, even the system is boring. This wouldn't be an issue if the villains were supposed to be cartoony, but everything takes itself very seriously. World Background: 3 - Executed well. Thank you for reading my review, this is not constructive criticism, just my review of the book. Don't expect it to stay up for long.

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