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MilfHunter_Kekyoin
MilfHunter_KekyoinLv65yr
2020-02-15 04:12

If you got past the fanboy's 5 star reviews then congrats!You found and objective one at last The first few chapters are a mash of arifureta and shield hero and make you scream your lungs out cliche.Furthermore the characters lack substance,they don't get any character development aside from the main chick after about 50 chapters.Also let's not forget our MC that after being put through tough things doesn't evolve at all and is a perfect example or boring MC with no drive whatsoever. The system? Annoying,the type of annoying that you'll feel like "yeah yeah,just show what he got and get over it" Grammar wise it's bad,but not the kind of bad to drop or bash the author since you can pretty easily understand,more like a bit stinging your eyes if english is your first language or you are frequently using it.The problem is that the author doesn't seem to have figured out his characters or system ot even romance plans and is going back and forth that it's getting extremely disappointing. TL;DR Wouldn't recommend reading honestly

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Many 4 star reviews are there on top/first page. As for the first few chapters, I want him to go out of that place. There might be another route I can use, but at that time, that route was the only one I knew, and maybe Arifureta and Shield Hero franchise are too big. As for MC, he has weak personality and trauma for a few years, making a drive for him suddenly might not be logical, since it is not easy to overcome trauma. System, Everyone has their preferences for this. I can only make the system like this for the sake of my plot. Grammar, I can only say, 'I apologize'. Thank you for your feedback.

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Transported to Another World? Cultivation World? A Modern World? How about mixing all of them? From countless planet in the Universe, Each planet has its own technology, culture, and civilization. There are many plot twists mixed inside where the usual 'Another World' actually holds more mystery. (Writing Quality): I'm not a native English speaker, and revision is under progress. There should be some mistakes left, but it shouldn't be that much. And there should be some cliches that presented in a bad way. It is also under revision. Although I can't completely erase that part cause it might affect the later story. I am rewriting it, so it can at least be presented in a better way. Unfortunately, the revision speed is rather slow since I need to make the new chapter as well. (Stability of Updates): 1 ch/day. But it could be 2 ch/day at weekends or holidays depending on how much time I have on that day. (Story Development): 'This is subjective'. I'm doing my best to present a good story, but it depends on your own preference too. One might say good, and one might say bad. Please don't force your ideal/preferences on this story, if you want the MC this way or the MC that way, you can try to write your own story. All in all, suggestions for a better story would be appreciated. (Character Design): MC has a deep-seated inferiority complex that built up for several years. It will be hard to get rid of all of that, logically. It wasn't something that you can say 'I want to change', and you will change 180 degrees. It will be a slow development of Characters and Personalities. (World Background): The story takes place in multiple world; most of the settings are fictional. If the world background is lacking some details, please do tell me 'which one' and 'what it is' so I can add a little tweaking in that part to make a better world. (Additional Comments): Many good scenes filled my mind that I can't help to write and share it with you all. Although, I know myself wasn't a great writer. I need all possible feedback to learn and improve. For you and me. Disclaimer: I will no longer respond to mean comments and reviews. All opinions are subjective. But, please, be gentle with any strong opinions. It's easy to say something behind a screen, but it can stick with people. Thank you, and I hope you enjoy my novel.

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