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zozzythebeast123
zozzythebeast123Lv144yr
2021-04-26 05:02

If your new to web novels you will probably like this novel. those of you like me who have read dozens this novel probably isn't for you. The best way I would describe it is everything seems really shallow at best. it has no depth to it and the writing is subpar compared to most decent novels. Every sentence has to much or to little. With the writer adding completely pointless info into almost everything. just one example being "mask of mischief what a peculiar name, Long chen thought in his mind as he went threw this knowledge." is there a need to add in his mind. can't be "mask of mischief what a peculiar name, Long chen thought as he sorted out the information he received." idk maybe the writer thinks most people are to stupid to figure out that thought takes place in the mind and we cant make that connection without reading it. that's just a small example. Wouldn't be a big deal except you find things like that in almost every sentence and paragraph. Every time he thinks to himself his names long chen but anytime he talks to someone or vise versa it's long tian. another problem instead of using pronouns like he, him, his they use long chen almost every single time. long chen got up in the morning as long chen looked in the mirror. long chen thinking to himself yada yada yada like that. its unbelievably frustrating. Pick a name and stop using it so much it seems like the author believes every time they do there saving a childs life.

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MJAgo
MJAgoLv14

Ok , i think i read enough chapters to give this novel a review...300+ chapters First of all i must say author has a creative mind and new ideas will come to his mind and he puts them in his story but sadly it's also has a downside for author because of it he can't focus on one or two stories he writes many novels as soon as he got a nice idea, well it's a mistake that new writers do you can't find a pro author to focus all his attention to more than 2 works...well as i said because of it the quality of his writing is getting a little bad and you will find many mistakes in story from misspellings to forgetting some minor things in story like the age restrictions of a tournament or the number of poison pills MC created etc... The next important matter is that even thought this novel has romance Tag ,you can't find a proper romance relationship building between characters only MC teasing Xun time to times while other girls get few talking with him and few lewd scenes (every 50+ chapters 😐 )(for R-18 scenes even if author doesn't want to write it continuously , sometimes just mentioning that they had a passionate night is enough when they go to sleep in their rooms) The same goes for Harem Tag ... when you combine Harem and romance Tags together you expect to get lovey dovey scenes and some normal chapters about their interactions and romantic moments to make their relationships bound stronger otherwise it'll become like those weird Chinese cultivation novels which MC has 99% of his mind about getting stronger and how to cultivate and 1% of his mind remind him he also has some women around the world 😂 I think the cause of it is at the beginning of this novel when few readers called MC a skirt chaser which scared the author and impacted the love part of the story...sadly. BUT on the other hand MC is ruthless which i like, and becoming a demon slowly well a person who will become a demon for the sake of his family not a brain dead evil demon who keeps killing for fun (hopefully it stay the same till the end) And in this novel we have many characters and places and empires etc but sadly it doesn't have a glossary about it so be prepare to forget some info in journey of reading this novel. And lastly if you want to read about a ruthless MC read this one but I'm not sure about the romance and Harem part cuz it's not developed properly yet after all this time... . . . - Writing quality: 7/10 - Stability of update: 10/10 - World background: 7/10 - Ruthless mc: 8/10 - Harem relationships building: 6/10 - Romance: 5/10 - Characters design: 7/10

LordInsanity
LordInsanityLv5

Crap, just trash. MC was killed by a typical thief and was isekai'd into a retarded 12 year old former genius, the first thing he does is go for a walk and ends up in a regular cliche. What's terrible about this novel is how stupid MC is, he was tricked by a kid into drinking poisonous tea, the reason he drank it was because the kid was like "it's not pensioned, I swear!" Suprise, suprise. It was pensioned.. Author uses this to give MC his cheat or whatever, which he feels guilt over since it wasn't originally his, amazing right? He found it in dumb-**** nowhere and he's feeling guilty. Next he proudly exposes that he's no longer retarded and has regained his "talent" to literally everyone, it's not like someone killed your father, and tried to kill you because you were both "talented' Author decided that MC has split personality disorder, calling him "Chen" in the narration and "Tian" to everyone else. As the reader and not another mob character for the MC, I find this utterly frusterating. Next is his mother and grandfather, MC was drugged and kidnapped in broad daylight, and nobody finds out, Amazing. If I had that level of stealth I would be so happy, I could sneak into all the shoppers drug marts and overdose without anyone finding out so I can forget about this novel. Anyways, his grandpa and mom didn't assign him a single supervisor despite him being "retarded." Which is, retarded. Honestly you have a kid who everyone thinks to have the IQ of a 2 year old, and how can he not have a single guard or supervisor. This caused him to be kidnapped, yay. Takes along time for background information of the world and cultivation to come out, MC acts all arrogant and shit for no apparent reason. Just think of a typical japanese Isekai "hero" from shield hero or some shit that acts like a typical douche, that's MC. Apparently innocent, but his character takes a 180 because his cousin tried to kill him and kills a guy without batting an eyelid, for someone from probably our world he might be a physcopath. This amazing move can only be considered a pro-gamer move, as a person of the same world I can only accede to his intellect on what to do when being isekai'd into an unknown wuxia world, not being cautious, but be a target. You've enlightened me author, many thanks, would only recommend to a vegetable.

House
HouseLv15

Writing Quality⭐⭐⭐⭐ Stability of Updates⭐⭐⭐⭐ Story Development⭐⭐ Character Design⭐⭐ World Background⭐⭐ I tried really hard to like this story. My biggest problem with the story is that it feels like its going nowhere. I feel like MC has no goal like noting to go for there also seems to be no enemy. So we just wave along with whatever is going on. I read like 270 chapters in 2 days and i can sum up what happens in a few lines. I feel like there is no substance in this story. MC just does stuff that's about it. We barley see MC fight we have noting to root for i think there are like 15 fighting chapters maybe less where MC is fighting. And when a fight happens MC is NEVER there. He is always comprehending some ****ty law or cultivation or whatever. So we get like 6-7 chapters of forgotten characters that fight and get like 1-2 where MC does something. MC also vanishes from the story for like 5+ chapters and we are like why do we need this info again? There are also some really stupid stuff going on like: - MC fell 5 minute's straight and had no injury what so ever (he was like just starting to cultivate to) Then he uses all his qi to fly up and he could not go more then 50m and fell down again. But 2 days later he can fly all the way up (like 300km) I think he was 8 grade mortal to like 5 grade second thingy So you are telling me he has 600 times more Qi now then he had b4? (also does not take him long to get to the top) -MC is flying up a mountain 15000feed (less then 5km) but it takes him 5h so you are saying me he is flying 5x slower then the average human walks? Then the next time he is flying super fast again its all over the place. He could fly 300km up a pit but he can't fly for a few km again next time cuz his Qi was out when he has allot more Qi now. -And don't get me started on the trails / dreams / ... we get like chapters upon chapters of random filler character fighting we never see again. -And After his first trail they said he will need to do another one at 20% of his bloodline yet now it looks like he will need to do it at 5% for no reason whatsoever. -... ... Then lets talk about MC. - He is fairly stupid makes retarded mistakes (obv stuff) - Should act evil when he acts more normal barley kills anyone - Cultivates like a hard demon cultivation thingy when all it accomplishes is to restrict mc do do certain stuff. -Also i was hoping for there to be some romance but MC is a blockhead Also don't get me started on MC secrecy. Hides his cultivation from his family for 270 chapters when all they do is worrie for him. Like they are not bad people like you might think they will backstab him or whatever. Even if its only to his grandpa & mother but NOOO he can't tell them shit . They took care of him when he was a retard for 6 years then again when he was training (aka not moving) for another 3/4 years. Yet he can't tell them he is strong and moving all over the place they still think he is a weak shit. We also know noting abut the world. Like all i can say you is eummm i think there are more continents. oo Yea and the last one, there is so much F I L L E R Idk there is so much more that pisses me off but ill stop here.

Cepheus_7439
Cepheus_7439Lv4

I only thing I can actually appreciate about this book is its updating stability..... MC’s cousin throws him off a cliff because MC touches the cousin’s crush by accident when MC is still believed to be retarded(intelligence=2 year old kid)....I mean is the cousin so retarded to kill to try kill the MC for just that.......(imagine killing a random child because your wife held him because she thinks the child is cute or something).... The MC recieves a ring through which he gains a cultivation technique which he practices without caring about its consequences ....the cultivation technique is written by someone in his dream....it doesn’t have a name to indicate whether it’s a demonic technique or flawed technique and he also takes another technique from the trash and practices it without checking anything(if its in trash, it might be useless for that higher being or it could be incomplete or even harmful).....also he is practically stealing the techniques from the person in his dreams....the nameless method could belong to a sect or organisation who will hunt him later accusing him for stealing(which he did)........ In the trial land he asks for permission to cultivate using an orb to which the queen who owns the orb rejects.So he decides to steal it and also acts shamelessly by saying that he didn’t......he also kill the guards and kills the queen’s nephew whose identity he used to steal the orb then he cuts the queen’s arms as punishment for accusing him and says that he left her alive because of her nephew who is his ‘friend’......... If he had that much strength he should have shown it by challenging the queen for a duel or something......you might say that MC should have taken those orbs as he wishes because his master was the one who made them but it would be a flawed logic as if you left something without indicating that’s its yours and years later someone comes and claims to be his successor and demands it.........MC is nowhere like a earthling as a normal **** from earth would be more conservative towards killing, stealing as well as acting shamelessly........ The MC didn’t have any enemies besides his father’s killers whom he doesn’t even care about and he also leaves for training leaving behind his mother and grandpa worrying as they did not know about his strength(I can’t believe the MC just left his mother who took care of him when he is retarded and again when he was in a coma......he could have said something like ‘I have gained some technique through enlightenment and became strong’ or ‘I got a mysterious teacher’ to lessen their worry.........He says that he loves his maids when he technically did not stay with them for even a month..... When he reaches a city, he dresses himself a commoner to ‘not attract attention’ but shows them his medallion when guards ask him 1 bronze coin extra then he kills them all when the guards suspect that he stole it(that how it looks it when a poorly dressed kid says when he comes form rich clan—the clans are known to be pompous and he knows it) ....so basically, he tries not to get attention then abandons that plan to save 1 bronze coin and kills every guard when they suspect him and the blames it all on his heart demon......later he offers to buy a horse worth 15 gold coins for 30 gold coins to keep up appearances when acting like a powerhouse then isn’t it logical to give more money to the guards to keep up the appearances as weak cultivator........ When inside a alchemy hall he meets a mortal grade alchemist and says that he is a sprit grade alchemist and when that mortal grade alchemist asks him doubts he answers in a haughty tone like’are you stupid to not see this’ when he only has theoritical knowledge only and that too has come from download of the inheritance.........the MC gets all his knowledge because of the inheritance, then what right does he have to call someone who practiced alchemy for decades to get where he was as ‘stupid’... Anyway the MC wants to grows strong but he doesn’t have a reason to as he already forgot about the assassins so there is only aimless world-building....the MC doesn’t show characteristics of 8 year old from cultivation world or a **** from earth but is a mindless blank character who potrays himself to be saint while being a hypocrite and a sore loser who shifts the blame on others like his heart demon when he was the one who chose it form a wide variety of options.....as the MC doesn’t have any goals except becoming stronger, the story becomes full of fillers with no actual content........ I have only read 150 chapters to write this review and some might say that the book gets better later on but I personally don’t think it’s a good book when you have to read more than 150 chapters right at the beginning to get to the good part.......

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