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Readoholic
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2020-08-14 17:36

I'll give this novel 5 shining shimmering stars 🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟, you'll ask why?..... hmm its simple because it's superb. The novels awesomeness is marked in every chapter. I am loving the Auxillary volume having side chapters as well. Those are incredible. -- The mystery around the plot at the initial level and then the perfect blend of characters with the story. It's great. -- Grammar wise it perfect. -- The pace and flow of the story are very smooth. Definitely is recommended to everyone! Please support the author as this story is a hidden gem. Kudos!

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Drakonous
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Aw, thanks so much Readoholic!

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GloriouslyFamous
GloriouslyFamousLv3

An excellent novel. The Author is an exceptional writer, and this story is a piece of art. The story starts off with character building and a suspenseful plot. The beautiful narrative continues on and builds a fascinating world. The most wonderful aspect of the story is that there is always something new with rich descriptions and vivid imagery. There is a sad undertone to the story, but it definitely helps in highlighting the happy occasions making them more real and easy to connect to. Grammar wise it is almost perfect and possibly one of the best works in WN. I think the most wonderful aspect of this novel is the character building. The MC is just wonderful; he is described very well and the backstories bring life to him making him seem very real. Not only is the MC well described, but so are the side characters. The dialogue between the characters flow smoothly and really highlight their personalities. Reading the story will make you feel that you have been introduced to a diverse cast of characters. Overall, it is a wonderful read and a definite recommendation, the authors, including me, can definitely learn from the meticulous writing and the readers can have a wonderful experience reading this piece of work. Recommendations - for the auxiliary chapter in clarification and explanation, I think you should add "(possible spoilers)" to the title as some extra information is revealed there. My personal opinion is not to leave the great side chapters in the auxiliary section but to add them to the story and just title them side chapter/ side stories. And, of course, it is added to my library to finish reading!

Drapetomaniac12
Drapetomaniac12Lv4

This novel is a masterpiece and the author is exceptionally talented. I'm like super unqualified to review this piece of art but I'll give it a shot anyway. Writing Quality- If any reader, I repeat, any reader, has a complaint with the writing style, he/she is a dumbass. The book is thoroughly detailed, even pertaining to small things that other authors miss. Whether it be describing how the food tastes, or the armour Fenrir wears or what clothes the characters are wearing or describing the surroundings... you get it. The interactions flow out smooth too, I laughed and smiled so much whenever Jason teased his sibling or friends and I gushed like crazy whenever Alice did something... anything. She'll be breathing and I'll be like, "aww she's so cute." This is low-key a review about how cute Alice is and needs to be treasured, okay? Fight me hmph. There weren't much grammatical errors either, just some typos that grammarly failed to pick up (you rely too much on that, author.) The book will make you weep and smile... sometimes at the same time. I was literally in awe when I read about the symbolism with the sun or when the shapeshifter predicted Jason's curse. The book is extremely well written. Kudos to you author! Story Development- A lot happens in one day in this story. The pace is right, neither too fast nor too slow. And since the author has just finished 10% of his story, I'm eagerly waiting to see how this progresses in the future. SPOILERS AHEAD Character Design- The male lead is the most infuriating character you'll ever come across. He's a jerk, d******d, a*** etc etc (you get the point). I felt like strangling him so many times. His relationships are a mess. He doesn't know what he wants, and even if he does, he messes it up. It's all complicated and he says he's trying again and again but he's not. The only relationship he puts effort in is with Alice (so that's a plus). He's a good dad and he genuinely makes efforts to be good. As a brother... eh, he's equally good and bad. Who sleeps with someone when his sister is right next to him? (That's just fucking messed up.) He's very overprotective of Alina but I have to admit, he genuinely cares about her (a plus again). The characters I have absolutely no complain about are Alina (SHE'S AN EFFING QUEEN), Alice (aww, an angel), Michelle (I think all the girls who read your book would aspire to be her, her strength is commendable and you can't help but admire her), Katherine (A QUEEN again but since she's gonna have her own book I don't know whether I'll still like her so let's wait), Junco (<3) . I used to like Ava but then... (I have no words.). Okay now Jason's harem: Elizabeth- Don't like her, she raped Jason (red flag); Melanie- I couldn't have been more vocal about how I feel about her, she's a psychopath, a stalker, oversteps her boundaries (I don't understand why Jason feels attracted towards her but then he's attracted towards anyone who has a vagina), she has a traumatic past so she's kind towards orphans but then she was busy masturbating instead of saving those kids (the one she deeply cares about); Katelyn- I don't really care much about her, we haven't had much of her, she betrayed Jason but she had her own reasons so I'm cool with her and lastly Emily- I really really liked her in the beginning. She refused to show how she felt about Jason, had her insecurities but one day at the shopping mall, she just snapped and kind of became desperate? So I have mixed feelings about her, as the story progressed I like her less than I used to. Moreover, she deserves better than Jason. Ken, Raphael, Watson, Asami, Mapel are cool too. The villains in the story are well crafted. It's undeniably clear that the author has spent a lot of time in writing this story :) Updating Stability- Updates are constant, author updates twice or thrice every week undoubtedly. World Background- It's expanded amazingly well. No complaints at all. This story is a hidden gem and deserves much more reads, like at least a million+. But sadly, Webnovel only gives exposure to contracted works. Anyway, the book is about to reach half a million views, so congrats author. WELL DESERVED. I just have one suggestion that in the beginning of your story (in the first auxiliary chapter), you should mention that the auxiliary chapters are side chapters and should be read after they finish volume 1 because I myself know two people who straight away read the side chapters and then thought that your book had a lot of smut. Lastly, for any readers reading this, READ THIS BOOK. You won't be disappointed. Also, I forgot to mention the synopsis is DAMN, especially the warning at the end, made me laugh xD

Murakami
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