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AraAra
AraAraLv115yr
2019-09-29 10:54

Cliches and difficult to read because of poor placement and grammar. That's all my opinion in the first to second chapters.

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White_Luck_1289
White_Luck_1289Author

I have tried to improve it in next chapters hope you will like it ๐Ÿ˜ƒ

Yuri_is_Ntr
Yuri_is_NtrLv5

I'm was struck hard when he wish to take goddess with him..... Think such stuff can only be found in trash jap works....

AraAra
AraAraLv11

So i told here this story is soo cliche. I think i've read in some fanfic chapter's in this story, so i think author maybe just copied from they're. For now i can say author have copy 2 fanfic if i think it, you all can find it in here webnovel.com.

Yuri_is_Ntr:I'm was struck hard when he wish to take goddess with him..... Think such stuff can only be found in trash jap works....
GoldenBeast
GoldenBeastLv2

This story looks a lot like Solate's novel

AraAra:So i told here this story is soo cliche. I think i've read in some fanfic chapter's in this story, so i think author maybe just copied from they're. For now i can say author have copy 2 fanfic if i think it, you all can find it in here webnovel.com.
DearCompanion
DearCompanionLv4

Don't bother reading this, the first thing mc do is save random couple masaomi, a strong ultimate class power, and cleria onto his inner world which is supposed to be secret. MC doesn't have anything to do with the two but he save them. Then he place all his weak wives onto his inner world. Masaomi and mc's wives interact and chat happily in a daily basis. There's no mechanism whatsoever that control his inner world. Guess the author always wears a green hat.

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