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bentobnu
bentobnuLv55yr
2019-09-09 19:23

Buddy you're letting this story get boring because 90% of the time they're having sex and no adventure nor emotion just sex you should just say '' we had a long night of love '' and make the story more interesting because it's going downhill

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White_Luck_1289
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Thanks for telling me, Next time I will make those parts short

Rifa_Jati
Rifa_JatiLv5

And the R18+ scenes is not that exciting, if you can't create the R18+ scenes, mm you better skip the scenes like bentobnu said, if you like to learn to create the R18+ scenes better, I recommended you read Nobonaga's imotou is my wife (just search in novelupdate), it's 1 on 1 but the R18+ scenes is so exciting for me.

White_Luck_1289:Thanks for telling me, Next time I will make those parts short
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