This review is based on what the author wrote. The criticism would be purely constructive and does not intend to discourage anyone from reading the novel. Worldbuilding- 3/5 The shallowness of the description of the world is so apparent. I get it that they are living in a confined space right now, but it would be better if you try to be wordy on this case since a lot chapter will happen on this 'Place' on the upcoming episodes. There are a lot of places that are mentioned in the earlier chapters, as well. It will be technically competent if you mention it one at a time. In this case, your novel is a reincarnation genre where it would go wrong unless you can describe those places in a bit descriptive way in the following chapter. Character- The people around the lead exists just for the convenience of the story - without deepness - you can make your characters carry some emotions, not only acting like a predictable robot. Please make them a real human being. Sentence structure- 2/5 A lot of paragraphs are so badly transitioned. It is making your lead looks like a multi-tasker. I rarely encounter grammatical errors and typos, as well. Which is good. Some punctuations are necessary for the readers to understand what is going on with the situations, and we can understand them clearly. Overall- 2/5 I love this kind of novel; I guess it all matters how the authors writes it. For me, it would be a good read if you don't have stories to enjoy anymore. What can I say is, this story has a lot of potentials. Just read a lot of popular books out there and particularly learn how they transition every paragraph. I wish you all the best.
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LIKEHe’s saying from a technical standpoint it 2/5; which is expected seeing as the author’s first language isn’t English. Even though he’s rating it 2/5 from a technical standpoint he’s saying he enjoys everything else.