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Katelijne
KatelijneLv144yr
2020-08-30 04:40

I was not a fan of this. The story develops really slowly, we have to go through chapter after chapter with the same scenarios taking place over and over. I felt like I could've skipped every 10 chapters and not really miss out. The male lead who disguises as a girl, is annoying and juvenile. I think this was targeted towards really young people who may not think too much about the really offensive and stupid ways he goes about to catch the heroine's affection. He kidnaps her, gropes her constantly, never listens to her opinions, ridicules her, pushes his will on her, acts angrily/aggressively at times when he doesn't get his will, mockingly laughs at her and won't leave her alone. Very romantic indeed. The author keeps mixing "he" and "she", mentions the wrong name on several occasions, has passable English but it's riddled with mistakes (you understand the sentences, but mistakes are abundant). English isn't my mother tongue either, and I know I make mistakes too, but I'm not publishing a book and asking people to pay for unlocks. I read until chapter 100, getting more and more annoyed with the stupidity of both leads. Then the timer on the free chapters ended, and I won't spend any precious chapter unlocks to find out when the male lead, disguised as a girl, will grope the female lead again. I'd skim the rest of the book if it were free. I guess I could write more about my gripes with this book, but I feel that writing this review took too much of my precious reading time already. I wish the author good luck in her future endeavours.

Reborn: The Unexpected Twist

ShinSungmi
4.4
322 Chs

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ShinSungmi
ShinSungmiAuthor

So, let me shamelessly review my novel with 5 stars. Honestly, compared to other works I have written before, I have put more consideration and effort into thinking out a plot for this. I tried to go with the cliché plot, but changing it into something that is not so cliché. That's my forte. Unlike my first novel on Webnovel, which was impulsively thought of, I took a lot of time into this and tried my best to leave no plot holes. I tried my best to make the characters, emotions, and scenes be as realistic as possible. So, please give this a try, and I promise to not disappoint!(⌒∇⌒) The female lead gradually develops into a strong character because even if she is reborn and knows the plot line, she's still a human. She'll feel all types of aches and emotions. She'll be confused on her path and sometimes even make wrong decisions. That's because even if normally we're given a second life, we're bound to make some mistakes. The female lead is not invincible; she's just a character like you and me. That's what I'm trying to portray. I'm trying to go as unique as possible so please support me!

5yr

A_cute_angel
A_cute_angelLv4

Really amazing work author......I recommended this novel to one of my friend and I know she is gonna like it......there is no reason for not like this amazing novel but i can't understand one thing author is taehee a boy or a girl??????why is everything going out of plot after jinhee ribirth????I think this novel has everything suspence, comedy, family drama, a little bit mystery and I think in future there will also romance so I am very exited.....thanks author for this novel🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏

5yr
Pelius_Anar
Pelius_AnarLv2

Highly recommend this book! i like the character development and writing style it easy to read and the author gets his image across really well! i for one will be reading more! good job author and keep at it!

5yr
latoya101
latoya101Lv5

Okay I'm confused is teahee a girl or a boy and really what going on with there attitude one minute they like her the next minute they don't is this and alternate universe.did she really dead or is she in a dream

5yr
JohnnyKbca
JohnnyKbcaLv4

When reviewing, I always give each category one extra star to the score. Writing Quality 2: The novel has some grammar errors, that pop up with some frequency, but that's only one reason for this score. The second reason for the low score is how unnatural the writing feels, as if it had been poorly translated from another language, which I would guess to be the case. Stability of Updates 5: Personally, I don't like this category, as sometimes the writer needs more time to finish up a chapter, but may end up sacrificing the quality to keep the release rate, so I always give it a 5. Story Development 2: A basic principle of writing is to show, not tell. Very rarely it occurs in this novel. It's the difference between reading a story and someone telling you how the story goes. One is much more engaging than the other. Character Design 3: Characters have some personality but they don't feel believable. E.G.: Taehee, who keeps throwing herself at MC no matter how much she is pushed away. World Background 4: The author did a good job of describing the world, and I could paint a had a good idea of everything that had happened. Review score (2+5+2+3+4)/5 = 3.2 Score given = (3+5+3+4+5)/5 = 4

5yr
Rex_shed
Rex_shedLv10

Can say more but good. As I think it's interesting to read it. But still....... Why not add more jealous brother also. Who is sis-con in it?

5yr
latoya101
latoya101Lv5

anger before thinking about tomorrow my god I just want my girl my FL to gett an email and be together and be your happy so I can be happy in everybody be happy and in the novel inside with nobody above but it's really good novel

5yr
IntanLestari
IntanLestariLv11

I've read this book until chapter 66, this is my review as far as i read : *writing quality : 8/10 it's really good , the writer is really talented but there is some typo and weird grammar, some of the events feels jumping out of nowhere without bridge *stability of updating : 10/10 It's already completed when i start reading this *story development : 6/10 the face slapping is too little (almost none for me) and the story is a little bit slow to my liking , but it's still fast enough to keep me going on and the story itself keep saying some mystery that make me want to know more *character design: 6/10 I'm sorry but this still feel like another character from any other novel with this two or more male character that suddenly fall in love with MC without rhyme or reason, it kinda confuse me about why jaehyun date her if in her last life he doesn't really like her, the writer too focused in the mystery thing but somehow forgot about love development between character *world background : 6/10 The world background a little bit too simple like our 21st century modern world with some rich family in there This story has so many potential, i wish my review could help the writer to improve in some aspect, and thank you for your beautiful story

5yr
arukiaruki
arukiarukiLv3

Shinsungumi, firstly, i still remember you from the cover thread, and that was where I first read your novels, I'll be blunt, I really like them, no flattery! I like the way you are creative in the romance part, and I like how the story is well paced, something not very common nowadays. I'm just waiting for the next chapter!

5yr
ggone_
ggone_Lv3

You’re definitely missing out if you haven’t added this book in your library yet. The title and synopsis says it all but what’s interesting about this reincarnation/reborn story is the, as stated in the title, the unexpected twist. I was quite surprised to find out that this author was also the one that wrote “Loved him and still loved him”. As expected, this book is just as good (or even better). Writing Quality: The author’s writing style is amazing and their grammar is on point as well. The way they described the characters and scenes were also captures beautifully. It was easy to visualize what was happening. Stability of Updates: I’m not quite sure how frequent the author updates. Story Development: In my opinion, it’s rather early to say anything about the development. So far, the plot and characters have been promising. This definitely won’t disappoint current and future readers.

5yr
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