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2019-09-09 15:14

When reviewing, I always give each category one extra star to the score. Writing Quality 2: The novel has some grammar errors, that pop up with some frequency, but that's only one reason for this score. The second reason for the low score is how unnatural the writing feels, as if it had been poorly translated from another language, which I would guess to be the case. Stability of Updates 5: Personally, I don't like this category, as sometimes the writer needs more time to finish up a chapter, but may end up sacrificing the quality to keep the release rate, so I always give it a 5. Story Development 2: A basic principle of writing is to show, not tell. Very rarely it occurs in this novel. It's the difference between reading a story and someone telling you how the story goes. One is much more engaging than the other. Character Design 3: Characters have some personality but they don't feel believable. E.G.: Taehee, who keeps throwing herself at MC no matter how much she is pushed away. World Background 4: The author did a good job of describing the world, and I could paint a had a good idea of everything that had happened. Review score (2+5+2+3+4)/5 = 3.2 Score given = (3+5+3+4+5)/5 = 4

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