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MacouilleETmoncul
MacouilleETmonculLv55yr
2019-10-09 20:12

Amazing! I love the idea but some part are not logical... ************************************************************************************************************

Playing with other Supernaturals

Goyya
4.5
1345 Chs

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Goyya
GoyyaAuthor

Thank you for your review. I might have interpreted things differently from the canon. Sorry about that.

5yr
MacouilleETmoncul
MacouilleETmonculLv5

No not that I meant the fact that his mother doesn't really try to know the truth an Kisuke doesn't try to have more information from his mother (like how she made him a pure human, etc...)

Goyya:Thank you for your review. I might have interpreted things differently from the canon. Sorry about that.
5yr
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Goyya
GoyyaAuthor

Ah, about that, I plan to make it all clear when she returns back to her House due to some incident that will force her to do so.

MacouilleETmoncul:No not that I meant the fact that his mother doesn't really try to know the truth an Kisuke doesn't try to have more information from his mother (like how she made him a pure human, etc...)
5yr
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MacouilleETmoncul
MacouilleETmonculLv5

Hey don't spoil me please mister AUTHOR I want to discover it when you write, you could just have said that i will see later in the story T_T

Goyya:Ah, about that, I plan to make it all clear when she returns back to her House due to some incident that will force her to do so.
5yr
Goyya
GoyyaAuthor

oops.. hehe.. I didn't tell any information though, aside from her returning... . . my bad

MacouilleETmoncul:Hey don't spoil me please mister AUTHOR I want to discover it when you write, you could just have said that i will see later in the story T_T
5yr
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MacouilleETmoncul
MacouilleETmonculLv5

Yeah but now I know that an accident happen... T~T

Goyya:oops.. hehe.. I didn't tell any information though, aside from her returning... . . my bad
5yr
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MacouilleETmoncul
MacouilleETmonculLv5

Yeah but now I know that an accident happen... T~T

Goyya:oops.. hehe.. I didn't tell any information though, aside from her returning... . . my bad
5yr
MacouilleETmoncul
MacouilleETmonculLv5

And I just discovered your book yesterday but you stop posting for the week... You need to give us an extra chapter for the spoil XD!

Goyya:oops.. hehe.. I didn't tell any information though, aside from her returning... . . my bad
5yr
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Goyya
GoyyaAuthor

Nope, pretty busy this week, and its already putting a dent to my stockpile... stockpile is one of the reasons I can keep writing.. xD

MacouilleETmoncul:And I just discovered your book yesterday but you stop posting for the week... You need to give us an extra chapter for the spoil XD!
5yr
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MacouilleETmoncul
MacouilleETmonculLv5

*Tch*

Goyya:Nope, pretty busy this week, and its already putting a dent to my stockpile... stockpile is one of the reasons I can keep writing.. xD
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MacouilleETmoncul
MacouilleETmonculLv5

Happy Birthday! ✌️I win! You posted a chapter XD!

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xenetu
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Lol best nickname ever

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