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2020-06-27 00:52

okay, so here's the thing, your character development and design are basically ****, sorry for offence but when I see your story and it's potential it just irritates me to no end that you mad your MC take the path to become a hermit and die in a castle/house/hut alone with a sad ending, i just want to drop it

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