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darkimortal
darkimortalLv65yr
2019-08-01 08:33

I gotta say the first chapter was completely and utterly USELESS! It ruined the story for me, the MC can choose HP races (which makes me think the system is a Skyrim _like_ system not a Skyrim system) but all of them are extreme demerits and he's forced to choose Human anyways then he chooses his looks to be THE exact same before he was force in HP (and don't get me started on him not wanting to be at least above average in looks everyone has something they don't like about themselves and he wants to be the same...). I firmly believe the system name should be changed to the Troll System.

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Wildstara
WildstaraLv5

Don’t like the guy above me.

WolfLord
WolfLordLv14

Well at least you have legitimate criticism

Book_Wyrm
Book_WyrmLv4

Where? I can’t see it.

WolfLord:Well at least you have legitimate criticism
DaoistEternalRest
DaoistEternalRestLv12

Yes let us read your one chapter "perfect" introduction to your story. Show us your "perfection".

tommy_king
tommy_kingLv14

The first chapter was useless as it gave mc options then basically forced mc to pick 1. There was no point of the options.

Book_Wyrm:Where? I can’t see it.
MacouilleETmoncul
MacouilleETmonculLv5

True there was no choice but only the illusion of choice, all the race presented showed extreme disadvantage and the only thing the author has to say I 'That's how they are presented in the movie/book' then why even give the choice, it's the first chapter the first thing à reader will read after the synopsis and it is useless, no it's not useless since we a least know that this isn't a Skyrim system One: because the system of skyrim doesn't give disadvantage to the player but only a different advantage for each race Two: The AI, if skyrim had an AI like this in the system no one will buy it, why? Because the AI would make you fight a lvl 100 alduin when your lvl 1 if you don't do what it want... Three: this novel is a Troll nothing te fact people like it show how short-sighted they are

MacouilleETmoncul
MacouilleETmonculLv5

he only said fact like it or not it's the truth

Wildstara:Don’t like the guy above me.
CrossCounty
CrossCountyLv3

That’s ur complaint? Petty.

darkimortal
darkimortalLv6

That's ur complaint? Petty.

CrossCounty:That’s ur complaint? Petty.
CrossCounty
CrossCountyLv3

Truly petty. Have to resort to mimicking like a 5 year old.

darkimortal:That's ur complaint? Petty.
darkimortal
darkimortalLv6

... I love that your complaint didn't explain anything just four words of course it didn't require any thought for the reply. Moron.

CrossCounty:Truly petty. Have to resort to mimicking like a 5 year old.
LuluViBritania
LuluViBritaniaLv14

if it is as he says then it doesnt need to be perfect just not as incredibly retarted as its made out to be

DaoistEternalRest:Yes let us read your one chapter "perfect" introduction to your story. Show us your "perfection".
LuluViBritania
LuluViBritaniaLv14

he was responding to a dumbass comment with the same level of intelligence

CrossCounty:Truly petty. Have to resort to mimicking like a 5 year old.
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