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TomTang
TomTangLv35yr
2019-12-20 16:09

The grammar isn't bad. However, the plot is a bit too undeveloped. It is unable to make any emotional changes to my mind. All in all, it is too unrealistic and predictable.

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aceattorney
aceattorneyLv5

Incorrect. The grammar is, in fact, quite bad.

Goatqueenlol
GoatqueenlolLv2

I hate the fact that stories like these,that have the same plot are doing so good when underrated authors have a much better storyline and character development. (Grammar as well)

Jesse_Webbeking
Jesse_WebbekingLv1

Yeah, I have to refute that. Not only is the grammar terrible, the choice in wording is extremely repetitive and the context of words and phrases used is often completely incorrect.

Rohen_Thar
Rohen_TharLv1

Fully agree, the most used sentence; "with her legs crossed".

Jesse_Webbeking:Yeah, I have to refute that. Not only is the grammar terrible, the choice in wording is extremely repetitive and the context of words and phrases used is often completely incorrect.
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Clain_Rivee
Clain_RiveeLv1

After reading 181 chapters and enjoying the story over the course of a couple days I felt like I owed it to the author to leave a review. My review will be slightly harsh, as I really do enjoy the story and I feel the author has talent and room to improve. World building This is where I felt the story was sadly lacking. Most LitRPGs or stories in general have some overarching theme. Take a look at novels like Overgeared, Solo Leveling, Legendary Moonlight Sculptor, Everyone Else is a Returnee. RPG elements are an integral part of these stories and have been incorporated in a way that makes them absolutely essential. Dungeons become a place to train awakened humans to defeat whatever opposition humanity faces. Nanomancer Reborn has no overarching theme and meanders endlessly, quite often I feel like I'm reading someone play a MMORPG never veering away from the endless dungeon grind. As I keep reading I continue to have so many questions. Why are there dungeons in this story? What planet is the main character even on? Is it earth? What opposition does the planet face? Why is there no main antagonist? If the MC used to be a tier 6 human then what about the other tiers? What are the main goals of the MC? Sadly 181 chapters in and there is no "plot" besides the MC grinding dungeons with her friends. The only things I know about this world is that there's a place called New York and that there's dungeons. But the story never answers why there are dungeons, or how they came to be, or even if this planet is Earth, as some of the geographical locations are different. Characters I really enjoy the characters in this novel. Shiro is quite the lovable protagonist, and a certified badass to the core. It's quite fun to read the character interactions with her friends and her escapades, however, no characters are without fault and there are quite a few things I would like to point out. One of the things that stood out to me in the first few chapters in this novel is how eager Shiro was to form a team, seeing as she was betrayed by her former teammates and killed. I understand there is a difference between grooming someone from youth and picking up random teammates, but I do find it odd how Shiro never shows any form of suspicion or PTSD from betrayal. The development of many characters are severely lacking, namely Lyrica and Madison. In recent chapters I've seen many commentators become increasingly annoyed at how Shiro seems to hand everything to Lyrica, someone already with a golden spoon, calling her a "leech" and such. Honestly, I'd have to agree with their sentiments, as I do find it strange that two random strays that Shiro picked up develop both hidden classes and hidden proficiency rising to the level of Shiro with ease. I think a great way to appease both the commentators and develop the characters a bit would be to shift the POV to the side characters and show them struggling in a dungeon and getting some decent loot drops rather than having Shiro hand them everything they need.

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