webnovel
TomTang
TomTangLv35yr
2019-12-20 16:09

The grammar isn't bad. However, the plot is a bit too undeveloped. It is unable to make any emotional changes to my mind. All in all, it is too unrealistic and predictable.

Liked by 24 people

LIKE
Replies4
aceattorney
aceattorneyLv5

Incorrect. The grammar is, in fact, quite bad.

Goatqueenlol
GoatqueenlolLv2

I hate the fact that stories like these,that have the same plot are doing so good when underrated authors have a much better storyline and character development. (Grammar as well)

Jesse_Webbeking
Jesse_WebbekingLv1

Yeah, I have to refute that. Not only is the grammar terrible, the choice in wording is extremely repetitive and the context of words and phrases used is often completely incorrect.

Rohen_Thar
Rohen_TharLv1

Fully agree, the most used sentence; "with her legs crossed".

Jesse_Webbeking:Yeah, I have to refute that. Not only is the grammar terrible, the choice in wording is extremely repetitive and the context of words and phrases used is often completely incorrect.
Other Reviews
Clain_Rivee
Clain_RiveeLv1

After reading 181 chapters and enjoying the story over the course of a couple days I felt like I owed it to the author to leave a review. My review will be slightly harsh, as I really do enjoy the story and I feel the author has talent and room to improve. World building This is where I felt the story was sadly lacking. Most LitRPGs or stories in general have some overarching theme. Take a look at novels like Overgeared, Solo Leveling, Legendary Moonlight Sculptor, Everyone Else is a Returnee. RPG elements are an integral part of these stories and have been incorporated in a way that makes them absolutely essential. Dungeons become a place to train awakened humans to defeat whatever opposition humanity faces. Nanomancer Reborn has no overarching theme and meanders endlessly, quite often I feel like I'm reading someone play a MMORPG never veering away from the endless dungeon grind. As I keep reading I continue to have so many questions. Why are there dungeons in this story? What planet is the main character even on? Is it earth? What opposition does the planet face? Why is there no main antagonist? If the MC used to be a tier 6 human then what about the other tiers? What are the main goals of the MC? Sadly 181 chapters in and there is no "plot" besides the MC grinding dungeons with her friends. The only things I know about this world is that there's a place called New York and that there's dungeons. But the story never answers why there are dungeons, or how they came to be, or even if this planet is Earth, as some of the geographical locations are different. Characters I really enjoy the characters in this novel. Shiro is quite the lovable protagonist, and a certified badass to the core. It's quite fun to read the character interactions with her friends and her escapades, however, no characters are without fault and there are quite a few things I would like to point out. One of the things that stood out to me in the first few chapters in this novel is how eager Shiro was to form a team, seeing as she was betrayed by her former teammates and killed. I understand there is a difference between grooming someone from youth and picking up random teammates, but I do find it odd how Shiro never shows any form of suspicion or PTSD from betrayal. The development of many characters are severely lacking, namely Lyrica and Madison. In recent chapters I've seen many commentators become increasingly annoyed at how Shiro seems to hand everything to Lyrica, someone already with a golden spoon, calling her a "leech" and such. Honestly, I'd have to agree with their sentiments, as I do find it strange that two random strays that Shiro picked up develop both hidden classes and hidden proficiency rising to the level of Shiro with ease. I think a great way to appease both the commentators and develop the characters a bit would be to shift the POV to the side characters and show them struggling in a dungeon and getting some decent loot drops rather than having Shiro hand them everything they need.

BrabbitX
BrabbitXLv5
Related Stories

The Cannon Fodder in the Global Apocalypse Game lives a leisurely life

#dotingmalelead #infrastructure #RPG #OPMc (Caution: Don't read while you're drinking. Author is not responsible for choking incident due to excessive happiness. XD Just sharing good vibes. If you're down and feeling sad, read my novel!) Li Chunhua never expected she would be transported in another world after she was reading an odd book she found in the Sect's Library. By the time she opened her eyes, her mind was instilled with memories of another girl whose appearance and name resembled hers. She actually became the vicious cannon fodder in that male lead angst novel she read. Faced with the future of miserable death, Chunhua decided to stay away from the male lead and the supporting characters and decided to live low-key. Thanks to her koi physique her road to a comfortable life was smooth sailing. When others are still starving by the lack of food, Chunhua had already started farming and rearing live stocks. When others are still without a proper shelter, she was already building roads. Although she was only eating her terrible cooking, her life was already good! [Congratulations for upgrading your thatched cottage to Level 1 log cabin.] [Congratulations for upgrading your Level 1 log cabin to Level 2 stone house.] [Congratulations...] Everything was was going well until she picked up an unconscious man covered in dirt in the forest. She always believe in karmic conditioning and therefore took care of him until he was back on his feet. Until one day, he told her his true name. Li Chunhua was dumbfounded. No way, the man I saved was actually the male lead! Is it too late to throw him back to the forest again? A certain someone's expression darkened and threw her on the bed. "You dare!"

The_Sweet_Dumpling · Fantasy
4.8
454 Chs

The Bigshot's Superstar Wife

Athena, Earth’s most glamorous lone assassin and the seal bearer of the Death Goddess, met her end on her final mission. She succeeded in eliminating the world’s most powerful Mafia leader with her bare hands, but it came at the ultimate cost, her life. Or so she thought. Instead of the eternal rest she expected, Athena’s soul transmigrated into the body of Athena Demerin, a rising celebrity in the Interstellar Era of the Andromeda Galaxy. As the cherished granddaughter of the Northern Duke on planet Asenus, the original Athena had strived to carve out her own path to stardom without leaning on her family’s immense power. But ambition came with a heavy price. She died from exhaustion… or so the official story claimed. The truth? Someone orchestrated her death. Now, the new Athena has inherited not only this body but its unresolved mysteries. Determined to unravel the secrets behind the original Athena's death and fulfill her dreams, she must also navigate a world of fame, family legacies, and interstellar intrigue. But life throws her another curveball, a marriage to Major General Mors Jericho, the galaxy’s most brilliant young warrior. Revered by millions, he is admired for his strength, intelligence, and commanding presence. Yet beneath the surface of this union lies a web of secrets that could shift the balance of power across the galaxy. As she uncovers the truth behind the forces conspiring against her, Athena must confront her own feelings about Mors. Can a marriage built on duty transform into love? Or will her husband turn out to be her greatest adversary? Will she follow her heart, carve her own destiny, or succumb to the shadows of her past?

Jiuxianzhi · Fantasy
5.0
96 Chs

Defy The Alpha(s)

Two centuries after the Great War, peace between humans and werewolves was finally achieved, or so everyone believes. Werewolves reign like gods, and humans remain blissfully unaware of their true place in the new world order. To maintain this fragile balance, each year, a handful of "lucky" humans are selected from various districts to attend Lunaris Academy, a prestigious institution that promises glory, status, and a chance to mingle with the elite. Those chosen are hailed as the lucky few, destined to marry powerful alphas and rise as luna. This year, Violet Purple is among the chosen, much to everyone's surprise. For an orphaned girl adopted by a disgraced prostitute, this is a golden ticket to a better life or so she's told. But Lunaris Academy isn’t the paradise it’s painted to be. Everything Violet and her fellow humans have been taught is a lie. Humans are far from equal; they're pawns in a much larger game. The academy is nothing but a gilded cage, and the students are lambs led to slaughter, playthings for the alphas to toy with in their ruthless games. To make matters worse, Violet catches the attention of the most dangerous players in this game, the Terror Four: the Alpha of the North, Alpha of the South, Alpha of the East, and Alpha of the West. Each one is more dangerous, more twisted, and more powerful than the last. But even among themselves, the alphas are divided, each with their own deadly ambitions. Yet, they all have their eyes on her. They expect Violet to play along, to fall in line like the others who worship at their feet, to break under their games. But Violet isn’t like the others. She refuses to bow. She’ll defy them all. *********** With a grin that made her uneasy, he handed the application to her. “Approve this one.” Principal Jameson’s curiosity got the better of her as she took the paper from him, her eyes scanning the text. Almost immediately, her breath caught in her throat, her eyes widening in disbelief. “What the...?” “It’s perfect, isn’t it?” Asher’s voice was almost gleeful. Fucking psychopath! Jameson could hardly believe what she was reading. “Mr. Nightshade, with all due respect, this applicant….this girl just admitted to—” She couldn’t even finish the sentence, still horrified at the explicit nature of the application. Taking a deep breath, she continued, “I’m sorry, but I cannot approve this.” “She’s issued me a challenge,” Archer said, a dark gleam in his eyes. “What?” “‘Wait till you see me in bed,’” he repeated the bold line from the application, his grin widening. “And I can’t wait to find out.” “Mr. Nightshade—” He stood up, cutting off her protest as he fixed her with an intense stare. “Approve the application. I won’t ask again.” Without waiting for her response, Asher strode out of the office, confident she would follow his orders. He always got what he wanted. Archer Nightshade walked down the hall, a spring in his step. For the first time in a long while, he felt alive, his blood pulsing with excitement. The other Cardinal Alphas had no idea what he was up to, but it would soon hit them. He’d just set the game in motion. And the target was Violet Purple. It was game on. Note : This is not your average werewolf story. Eveything you think you know about werewolves would be challenged in this book. And yes, it is reverse harem. Do give the book a try.

Glimmy · Fantasy
4.8
181 Chs