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Origin_Saint
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2020-03-13 16:44

I like how the mc grows as a person and this last chapter explains a lot since the mc was making some dumbass decisions before now. Anyway, I love the book so I hope you continue writing.

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This review is part of a swap. What I like is the originality to the cultivation and Rebirth themes, utilizing Chakra and known methodologies into the story. Quite ingenious actually. I really enjoyed MC's moment with the gods and the trials. His Rebirth is gold, brilliant. MC is coming across as a well rounded character. Kind of like an anti-hero. The telling of his family is cleverly executed. A few things this story needs. Revision for technical quality (grammar and typo fixes, novel format), especially in the first chapters up to when MC meets God. I'm going to be honest, those chapters were really sloppy. These are your opening chapters, which need to hook your readers line and sinker. Also, when it comes to opinion type perspectives like the prologue, be aware that some readers may take offense or feel awkward by it. When formulating such character opinions, they need to be written so it's clear that the perspective is from the character and not propaganda. It has to come across objective, non bias and (of course) story related. I've seen a lot of authors get in hot water because the narrative comes across as propaganda, political agendas and so forth where it really isn't. Even I've fallen into this trap and faced some nasty hate mail for my self pub stuff because peeps thought I'd spoon fed them gay. You don't want that. If you revise these things, you have a potential 1m+ viewer with power stones raining in.  I'm even cocky enough to say this can be a contract worthy story WN can proudly show off provided the technical and storytelling quality is smooth and tight. Lift the bar. Thanks for sharing. I hope my feedback hel** a bit.

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