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2019-11-11 03:15

This is one of the worst stories I've ever started to read. The idea of returning back in time and make changes while not new is at least one not so overused like isekai. Nevertheless what could become an interesting story is ruined by bad grammar and bad characters. The story is almost unreadable, I mean if you publish a story, at least use free programs like Grammarly which would make the story at least readable. This is worse then a MTL chinese novel and that means something. While the idea of bringing new developments into ancient times is good, you need to show how that happens. But in this story there is this 5 year old boy who asks his parents for beetroots on day one and on day two has produced sugar and alcohol. I mean how? It's not how that works. It should at least be believable.

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