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GALAXIANALv35yr
2019-07-19 05:39

you have done a great job dear. you write well and I like the cover and synopsis. however, I'd advise you to lengthen your chapters a bit more. but overall, your story is nice. keep up the good work

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PsyberRose
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Part of a review swap, and at time of writing, there are 70 chapters. Have read until Ch.68. Writing Quality: English isn't Author's main language (like me) but it's not horrible or really bad. There are only minor errors and the flow of the story is not affected generally for me. The quality only gets better as you read on, so that's a huge plus. Stability of Updates: Very regular and persistent. I would, however, advise Author to perhaps think of slowing down a bit ... though other readers may kill me for that. Two releases a day is okay, I believe. It's just a suggestion, of course. Stockpiling chapters allow you to rest once in a while, and also takes into account times when you're unable to write (eg falling sick/exams etc). You can have mass-release events when there are a lot of stockpiled chapters. Story Development: It's a slice of life, so the pacing is slow. Which, personally, I like. I also love the details given and the description. However, I find it a bit disorienting when the scene seemingly jumps from one to another, or when there is a dream sequence. You could add a 'divider' sort of thing to indicate that the next paragraph had nothing to do with the one before it. A small symbol or whatever inbetween the two paragraphs would help teh flow and smoothness of reading. Character Design/World Background: The characters are well thought out and you can connect well with them. All in all, a good and enjoyable read. Came for the review, but staying for the story. This remains in my library. All the best, Author!

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