Review Detail of Reis123 in Broke: A Clone Wars Tale (Star Wars)
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Well, it's me, the author, again. First of all, I want to say that this is the second review I did of my novel, but, considering that the first one was when the novel had only one chapter, and I didn't know how to write, or, actually, I didn't know anything at all. So, I will soon delete the first review I did, and leave only this one. Now that we got that out of the way, let's talk about the novel. The first thirty, maybe forty chapters are from when I had just started writing, and had no idea how to do it, at least not well. I plan to, after the story is finished, revisit those chapters, correct grammar, and expand them to match the ones after fifty or so. So, I ask you all to give the novel a chance, even if it doesn't seem exactly awesome at the start. Please remember I am I'm not a native English speaker, although I have made up for that, and started correcting my grammar mistakes as soon as I realized I really liked to write, and I didn't want the novel to be unreadable Trash. Also important, although I tried to make things as similar to the original lore of Star Wars and Clone Wars, some things are different. It is a fan-fic after all. Lastly, I, as the author, am always open to suggestions and ideas, and, unless you are being extremely rude for no reason (it never happened, but who knows), I will always accept those comments, although I might not follow what you, as the reader, wants. I think that is all, so, thanks for reading until here, and I hope you enjoy the novel!
Broke: A Clone Wars Tale (Star Wars)
Reis123
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I really like this fanfic and find it entertaining, but why does Grievous cough? I can understand that you don't follow the lore 100% correctly, but please he only coughs in episode 3 because mace windu crushed his breastplate armor with the force on coruscant (2003 clone wars and the novel labyrinth of evil both have this, I am not sure about the novel of episode 3). If you know of any episode in the 2008 series where Grievous coughs, then just delete this comment. oh if you want help with lore stuff (not lore that would effect your story telling...stuff like vehicle stats/names or weapons), I'm glad to help because I like your novel and with just a bit more accuracy the novel could become a point higher in awesomeness. As a little example the death of rozales above Ryloth you wrote that he used a V-Wing, a interceptor that was only used at the end of the clone war should have been a V-19 Torrent or the time with the phase 2 armor that was only seen after 2 years of the war as an experimental armor for arc officers not 4 months. But I still read all the chapters because I like it đ
Those are the kinds of change I decided to make to the lore simply because it doesn't affect the story progress. About Grievous laugh, many pointed out the same as you, but since I find it difficult to imagine him without his cough, I decided to include it. Since V-wings are one of the most famous starfighters, and most people know them, I decided to bring them earlier into the novel. Same with the Phase II armor. Those are the kinds of things that the majority of the readers (who aren't ******** SW fans) will pay attention to. Also, don't worry, I won't delete your comment, since it's a genuine question/concern.
crasy_rex:I really like this fanfic and find it entertaining, but why does Grievous cough? I can understand that you don't follow the lore 100% correctly, but please he only coughs in episode 3 because mace windu crushed his breastplate armor with the force on coruscant (2003 clone wars and the novel labyrinth of evil both have this, I am not sure about the novel of episode 3). If you know of any episode in the 2008 series where Grievous coughs, then just delete this comment. oh if you want help with lore stuff (not lore that would effect your story telling...stuff like vehicle stats/names or weapons), I'm glad to help because I like your novel and with just a bit more accuracy the novel could become a point higher in awesomeness. As a little example the death of rozales above Ryloth you wrote that he used a V-Wing, a interceptor that was only used at the end of the clone war should have been a V-19 Torrent or the time with the phase 2 armor that was only seen after 2 years of the war as an experimental armor for arc officers not 4 months. But I still read all the chapters because I like it đ
Of course. You can either send then here, or in our discord (https://discord.gg/Gdv2arS). Either way is fine, and I will gladly answer your questions.
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I'm assuming you haven't started reading the novel yet. The main character isn't a Jedi or something of the like, but just a normal clone. I try to make it clear from the very first chapter that he won't ever use the Force. He is just a normal clone, trying to survive the war with his brothers. Also, there will be no harem or romance whatsoever. My focus is on showing the clone side of the Clone Wars, because in the movies and series we always see everything from the Jedi's point of view.
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It follows canon-ish. I try to follow the timeline we have, and major events (battles, deaths of important characters, and so on) won't be altered. Basically what I am saying is: people who die in the series die here too, and those who live live here too. However, it is, after all, a fanfic. There will be differences here and there, as well as many original battles and characters. As for what changes there are, you will have to discover by reading. The same goes for the protagonist's unit.
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I can read it without any fear. I try to explain everything so those who doesn't know SW doesn't get confused. Worst case scenario, you simply won't get some references here and there, but it doesn't affect your reading experience in any way.
1Primo:Is this good to read for someone who is unfamiliar with the Star Wars series? I'd like to give it a go, but only if I'm not lost and trying to catch up.
the ** 3 in the description of the novel literally drove me away from the novel. to be perfectly honest the fact that even though its 1 in a million our mc might(operative word here) be a lucky clone with the force but we just don't know it is a charm in and of itself. now that is for sure not gonna happen unless our author lied to us. don't get me wrong theres nothing bad about doing a non force user in starwars its just that is locked in now (that he literally will never have them) and there is no possible awesome moment to come that our mc might unlock em.
I completely get what you mean. However, the reason I decided to make it clear that he won't have Force powers is because I had way too many readers that were always asking when he was going to get his powers, and I decided even before I started writing that he wasn't. Maybe it was just by convoluted thinking, but I got the impression that people didn't care as much for the story as for that single moment where the MC got his powers, and I didn't want that. So, I decided to add that in the synopsis later, so anyone who decides to read won't be disappointed later. Still, there are a lot of people asking when he will get the Force, even if I already made it clear he won't. But again, I completely get what you mean, but I had my reasons for doing so (the ones above)
America_Yea:the ** 3 in the description of the novel literally drove me away from the novel. to be perfectly honest the fact that even though its 1 in a million our mc might(operative word here) be a lucky clone with the force but we just don't know it is a charm in and of itself. now that is for sure not gonna happen unless our author lied to us. don't get me wrong theres nothing bad about doing a non force user in starwars its just that is locked in now (that he literally will never have them) and there is no possible awesome moment to come that our mc might unlock em.
Honest request author I would like to continue reading the star wars fan fiction called Roger roger Mc reincarnated into a droid body original author stopped writing and its already translated So if you want a new star wars fan fic project check it out and if suitable please make it that It was left on a cliff hanger before the clone wars or its early days
Uhmm... I don't think I can do that. It doesn't feel right to take someone's work (even if it is a fanfic and dropped) and just continue writing over it. I don't know what the author intended, nor why he dropped it, and I honestly wouldn't like it if someone did it to my novel. A fanfic about a fanfic, I'm cool with that. But not continuing on top of something someone else wrote. I completely get why you would want to see it, though. I read more than one novel that was dropped and I would love to see it continue, but as an author, it just doesn't feel right. I will definitely check it out, and maybe, when I write a new SW fanfic, I might use the same base idea, if I like it.
BrianGallacher7:Honest request author I would like to continue reading the star wars fan fiction called Roger roger Mc reincarnated into a droid body original author stopped writing and its already translated So if you want a new star wars fan fic project check it out and if suitable please make it that It was left on a cliff hanger before the clone wars or its early days
Reis123:Those are the kinds of change I decided to make to the lore simply because it doesn't affect the story progress. About Grievous laugh, many pointed out the same as you, but since I find it difficult to imagine him without his cough, I decided to include it. Since V-wings are one of the most famous starfighters, and most people know them, I decided to bring them earlier into the novel. Same with the Phase II armor. Those are the kinds of things that the majority of the readers (who aren't ******** SW fans) will pay attention to. Also, don't worry, I won't delete your comment, since it's a genuine question/concern.