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Don't like the Evolving Amplifying Mark. Five-fold the strength in the future? While he's already at Jounin level with only five years of training. If this trend continues what tension would there even be in fights? It's going to be boring and predictable or you'll end up having to nerf and or come up with excuses like needing to "hide his powers" to make sense.
You are right I've completely forgotten, but perhaps someone fresh will understand and can take your comment into consideration who felt like me at the time. All good thanks for pointing it out.
I would be shocked, angry, confused, and I would feel like it was not justified.
C'mon she didn't think, "You are now marked as my prey. I will come back when you are more delicious", was important? Along with the bite mark... ^^ okay. Well not like he will be able to kill her anyways just sayin for a ninja that is supposedly was trained in tactics and fighting it is a weird oversight and doesn't make sense.
What happened to my mind body soul are yours? I'll follow your commands with complete obedience. People get comfortable then forget what they promised.
Agree here. Absolutely hate the "kit" thing that they use for Kurama. Also don't like the "It's Pack their Pack" thing they do with Kakashi either.
Are u not tired of fanfics with the "gamer" ability. He already has something similar to a status window.
Well, I'll exit here. Cya ✌🏾
Then briefly give an overview of the fights that Fujin does not participate in through his observations. Example: "Fujin stood on the stands as the battles continued. 3 teams were eliminated with (insert name) being disqualified due to poison, (insert name) due to a miscalculation on chakra exhaustion, etc. This whole chunin arc has been really long winded as well. Who cares about the training room seals, the elemental crystals and whatever else if it doesn't come up in the future as foreshadowing. These should be lightly told to give an overview and the plot should move. Not devote a whole chapter to this stuff.
I'm truly enjoying it. Sad that there are only 16 chapters wish I found this later. Overall I find the plot, characters, OC, and world building topnotch. Don't care if anyone else bothers reading it or what opinions they have, but I'm waiting for the next chap. Seems to update regularly hopefully that continues.
Also I'm not saying this to prevent it. It's your story have them marry and birth Indra it doesn't matter. I'm just talking about fanfic's in general. If you build an original plot/character and have the ability to literally create a perfect women including her looks, flaws, speech, backstory, etc. Why go after someone from the main cast especially when she's to birth the savior? I just find it strange.