Just read my comments in the first three chapters to find out. Basically the mc is supposed to be this super genius that dismantled and rebuilt society on a merit based system, that makes me think. 'Oh you are a pedo? Oh but you are super smart? Hired!' Don't really know why. And he has mentioned actually killing before and leading basically terrorists, just think of a ripoff Code geass. He took it upon himself to gather all the hatred when he is the one that rebuilt society so the truly talented and determined can rise? Why is he so hated then? Even if he took all the hatred people thinking he is a terrorist. In a mere few years hostility will resume, I have no doubt of that, since at most internet terrorism has occurred, no mentions of actual terrorism so dunno. So yeah it isn't like Lelouch where he played the part of a manipulative ego maniac that ruled Britannia and he was killed by 'Zero' with someone they think as a savior peace might last a bit longer. Naive thinking for a supposed super genius no? Another thing when he died and was somehow chosen for some BS eternal being he didn't question it at all. Like sure he asked why but that's it. He acted like an over excited **** and all. Nothing like someone so closely based off of Lelouch, who should be cunning cold and calculating. Next the eternal being already said find companions as he goes journeying the multiverse. What does the MC do? Wishes for a companion. Saves a wish, then wishes the companion to have a body when HE IS NIGH OMNIPOTENT. basically godlike. Oh and some sprinkles of annoying stuff, misspelled word or two and a short word count per chapter with the only reason being 3 to 4 chapters long is the many spaces in between. But I digress, A good 70 to 90 percent of WB readers, especially fanfiction, will read just about anything regardless of grammar or plotholes. Just to be nice I'll give him 3 stars. This is my early review for this fic. -Yours truly, Asura.
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My grammar and spelling has Improved in the more recent chapters and the word count for most of my new chaps is 1000+. There are still beings who could whoop his ass like the great evil beast from DC
My grammar and spelling has Improved in the more recent chapters and the word count for most of my new chaps is 1000+. There are still beings who could whoop his ass like the great evil beast from DC
Then for the grammar issues edit your previous chapters since first impressions are importance, and you may choose to merge the shorter chapters because each chapter didn't really bring anything new to the table progression wise. For the first 4 chapters it felt like it should've just been one chapter. And you fucking wrote an infinity sign in his battle power. That means it doesn't matter what the **** he does. He is literally fucking infinitely more powerful. I don't read DC but I do know there are alot of bull**** higher powers. Besides his only challenge is gonna be in the DC universe huh? What about other times? Is the main entertainment gonna be like the OP Japanese Mc's? Fucking dumbass mofos that people laugh at? And you didn't defend yourself in the issues I first addressed basically admitting that you just BSed and didn't think ahead or just thought it was cool so you put it in.
Quarette:My grammar and spelling has Improved in the more recent chapters and the word count for most of my new chaps is 1000+. There are still beings who could whoop his ass like the great evil beast from DC
Then for the grammar issues edit your previous chapters since first impressions are importance, and you may choose to merge the shorter chapters because each chapter didn't really bring anything new to the table progression wise. For the first 4 chapters it felt like it should've just been one chapter. And you fucking wrote an infinity sign in his battle power. That means it doesn't matter what the **** he does. He is literally fucking infinitely more powerful. I don't read DC but I do know there are alot of bull**** higher powers. Besides his only challenge is gonna be in the DC universe huh? What about other times? Is the main entertainment gonna be like the OP Japanese Mc's? Fucking dumbass mofos that people laugh at? And you didn't defend yourself in the issues I first addressed basically admitting that you just BSed and didn't think ahead or just thought it was cool so you put it in.
Quarette:My grammar and spelling has Improved in the more recent chapters and the word count for most of my new chaps is 1000+. There are still beings who could whoop his ass like the great evil beast from DC
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Maybe he meant the mc will have infinite in that certain verse
AsuraMonarch:Then for the grammar issues edit your previous chapters since first impressions are importance, and you may choose to merge the shorter chapters because each chapter didn't really bring anything new to the table progression wise. For the first 4 chapters it felt like it should've just been one chapter. And you fucking wrote an infinity sign in his battle power. That means it doesn't matter what the **** he does. He is literally fucking infinitely more powerful. I don't read DC but I do know there are alot of bull**** higher powers. Besides his only challenge is gonna be in the DC universe huh? What about other times? Is the main entertainment gonna be like the OP Japanese Mc's? Fucking dumbass mofos that people laugh at? And you didn't defend yourself in the issues I first addressed basically admitting that you just BSed and didn't think ahead or just thought it was cool so you put it in.
