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Jary
JaryLv45yr
2019-10-15 09:55

I like the story but the grammar needs some improvement. I can help you with the editing if you want😉😁😊 Just tell me😅😅😅😅😅 Feel free to contact me Hahahaha

Reborn : Space Intelligent Woman

ZerahNeko
4.6
2144 Chs

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ZerahNeko
ZerahNekoAuthor

Really? I need an editor...how can i contact you?

5yr
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Yuki_hime
Yuki_himeLv6

I really like this kind of reborn..Female lead become clever and kind after her reborn..also having that kind of space is really good and a cute guardian...I also want it..💕💕💕 author-sama when we will meet the male lead..I can't wait to see him..

5yr

ryuxie
ryuxieLv11

I love this kinda of story.thanks for it.im really having fun reading it😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊

5yr
cute1234
cute1234Lv4

I don’t mean to discriminate. English is my 3rd language. This is only an honest opinion please don’t be offended. This story still needs a lot of editing. Also, please improve your vocabulary ..

5yr
Pzelayav
PzelayavLv14

Muy buen inicio. Espero que el autor siga con la historia, lo apoyaré. Espero más capítulos para entrar en la historia. Felicito al autor, se que será una gran historia. Volverá dos o tres años antes? Para salvar a su abuelo? Ojalá que sí el autor lo haga y que aparezca pronto el MC.

5yr
1stSlug
1stSlugLv13

This review is mostly for the Author and where they need to focus on what to fix with their writing style. Okay, so I've read from start to end (current end Chapter 203, with the ave cost in stones between 4-6 per chapter, which is (VERY) roughly around 5-600 stones in total), and here are my views so far (Warning Spoilers Below!): The Cons: The Grammar is terrible!!! This is a major thing and it needs to be addressed as soon as possible. Every time I see a misspelled word, wrong word or even a missing comma, it ruins the reading experience. It's jarring and disruptive to read smoothly. Your story needs some SERIOUS TLC (tender loving care) with regards to editing! There are also some rather glaring plot holes with regards to the story, mostly involving the time travel aspect. If you're going to play with time travel, you need to clearly and logically sound out the backstory. Simply forcing things to mesh doesn't work for a lot of readers. An example: (I've commented on this before) But the timeline with MC past enemy's is weird due to the fact that they both joined Uni later in their past lives (both around 20-21, that's a 2-3 year difference), but now they've both joined at 18 with no explanation on how this happened. So yes, you can say it's "due to the butterfly effect", but you need to explain HOW this came about. They don't share the shame social circles, nor have they met in this lifetime. So why the enemy female lead is suddenly at Uni with no logical reason, other than "Because!" is silly. The "side villains".... This isn't so much a con on your part, but more of a generalization for the genre you're writing in. Are all the young woman in this world retards? Can't people take rejection and move on? It drives me crazy reading the level of stupidity of this arch-type. It seriously makes me grind my teeth in frustration. Now normally, I should post the "Pros", but seeing as your novel is already highly ranked at the time I've typed this, I feel like you've already nailed down what you need to write. But for future readers, I'll type down a few quick points: The Female lead is a level headed young woman, who is willing to put in the effort to succeed in life on her own terms. Can never say no to cute pets. Female lead can kick ass. That is all.

5yr
angel1331
angel1331Lv5

Good story..rebirth novels are really a lot more exciting and interesting to read waiting for the female lead to get revenge and her to achieve success..this novel so far is really good👍🏼👍🏼👍🏼

5yr
DaoistRIkQDJ
DaoistRIkQDJLv11

This book has A LOT of filler chapters, I mean A LOT, nothing gets done, no progress is made, right now I’m just like, “GET TO THE POINT” I’ve honestly tried to get past the 500+ chapters of stale and repetitive story but I’ve reached full capacity…sorry I’m out

2yr
Angel46
Angel46Lv3

This is the best novel I have read so far. It is very interesting and I could read it for hours a day. But please work on your spelling and keep up the good work!!!

5yr
bubbleguppy
bubbleguppyLv10

Enjoyed this novel to the point where I was up until 2am and spent all my spirit coins reading the private chapters. Kudos to the author and the translator. Few typos here and there that affected the sentence structure but I totally overlooked 👍

5yr
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