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cute1234
cute1234Lv45yr
2019-08-24 16:51

I don’t mean to discriminate. English is my 3rd language. This is only an honest opinion please don’t be offended. This story still needs a lot of editing. Also, please improve your vocabulary ..

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LoveBiscuit
LoveBiscuitLv3

I was starting to think I was the only one here who couldn't get past the english

Dilnawaz_Raza
Dilnawaz_RazaLv1

Hii

Dilnawaz_Raza
Dilnawaz_RazaLv1

Hii

Dilnawaz_Raza
Dilnawaz_RazaLv1

Hii

cute1234
cute1234Lv4

Hello?

Seli
SeliLv15

An editor is needed badly.

Amuriana_Edwards
Amuriana_EdwardsLv3

Hi

BuruxXxRynna
BuruxXxRynnaLv11

So, does this mean that the vocabulary is terrible through out the entire story and it doesn’t end up getting fixed? Please tell me as this will determine wether I continue. I’m not really picky about the story but if the vocabulary is this bad through out the entire story, I don’t have the tolerance to continue.

cute1234
cute1234Lv4

I only read less than a hundred chapters. The story is really good. It really just need editing. And it’s has been a while since I read the book. I’m not sure if they fixed it now 😊

BuruxXxRynna:So, does this mean that the vocabulary is terrible through out the entire story and it doesn’t end up getting fixed? Please tell me as this will determine wether I continue. I’m not really picky about the story but if the vocabulary is this bad through out the entire story, I don’t have the tolerance to continue.
BuruxXxRynna
BuruxXxRynnaLv11

Thanks for the information. It’s highly appreciated and I keep that in mind. 😁

cute1234:I only read less than a hundred chapters. The story is really good. It really just need editing. And it’s has been a while since I read the book. I’m not sure if they fixed it now 😊
ellanggala
ellanggalaLv10

English is my second language.. so agree with you. this novel needs a lot of editing. I'm trying to contemplate more on the grammar. really sometimes I really need to analyzed what the translator wants to convey..

Blue_Blitz
Blue_BlitzLv3

The grammar sadly never gets better. it's this bad throughout the entire story. I had a migraine after I finished the book but I did enjoy the story to some point.

BuruxXxRynna:So, does this mean that the vocabulary is terrible through out the entire story and it doesn’t end up getting fixed? Please tell me as this will determine wether I continue. I’m not really picky about the story but if the vocabulary is this bad through out the entire story, I don’t have the tolerance to continue.
BelieverOne
BelieverOneLv2

😂😂😂stay away from such books😂or you'd go crazy

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1stSlug
1stSlugLv13

This review is mostly for the Author and where they need to focus on what to fix with their writing style. Okay, so I've read from start to end (current end Chapter 203, with the ave cost in stones between 4-6 per chapter, which is (VERY) roughly around 5-600 stones in total), and here are my views so far (Warning Spoilers Below!): The Cons: The Grammar is terrible!!! This is a major thing and it needs to be addressed as soon as possible. Every time I see a misspelled word, wrong word or even a missing comma, it ruins the reading experience. It's jarring and disruptive to read smoothly. Your story needs some SERIOUS TLC (tender loving care) with regards to editing! There are also some rather glaring plot holes with regards to the story, mostly involving the time travel aspect. If you're going to play with time travel, you need to clearly and logically sound out the backstory. Simply forcing things to mesh doesn't work for a lot of readers. An example: (I've commented on this before) But the timeline with MC past enemy's is weird due to the fact that they both joined Uni later in their past lives (both around 20-21, that's a 2-3 year difference), but now they've both joined at 18 with no explanation on how this happened. So yes, you can say it's "due to the butterfly effect", but you need to explain HOW this came about. They don't share the shame social circles, nor have they met in this lifetime. So why the enemy female lead is suddenly at Uni with no logical reason, other than "Because!" is silly. The "side villains".... This isn't so much a con on your part, but more of a generalization for the genre you're writing in. Are all the young woman in this world retards? Can't people take rejection and move on? It drives me crazy reading the level of stupidity of this arch-type. It seriously makes me grind my teeth in frustration. Now normally, I should post the "Pros", but seeing as your novel is already highly ranked at the time I've typed this, I feel like you've already nailed down what you need to write. But for future readers, I'll type down a few quick points: The Female lead is a level headed young woman, who is willing to put in the effort to succeed in life on her own terms. Can never say no to cute pets. Female lead can kick ass. That is all.

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