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SpelloyalLv122yr
2022-05-30 11:40

To be honest, this isn't a bad fanfic even though I only give it two stars, the problem is that it's obviously the fast food version of a fanfic. The author often repeats phrases and scenarios, phrases like "the appearance of the MC is like a black hole" were copied and pasted at least 50 times throughout the fanfic. The process of conquering a girl is always extremely similar and always because of the MC's appearance. At least 5 times the first kiss was with the MC flicking the forehead and then the girl insisting on receiving a kiss. In short, a lot of things are repeated and much looks like it was put just for word count. Half the story (mostly in the first world) looks like the same sandwich but changing a condiment like cheese or pickle. I recommend reading this fanfic always skipping boring and repetitive parts, if that's done it's worth reading, but taking these problems into account I give the fanfic 2 stars.

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