Review Detail of 8Eight in The Immortal Player

So let’s review this story, I’ll be honest the story ain’t exactly groundbreaking in any way, however I still do enjoy it a bit. My main problems with the story mostly comes from the lack of editer, I’m not sure if it’s just me, but I feel the stories writing feels incredibly hectic at points, not in a fast paste way, but just jumping really quickly between various actions The characters are shockingly more fleshed out than your typical wuxia novel which is honestly surprising to me so kudos to you on that Game mechanics are iffy at best and awful at worst, I generally dislike the perma death game thing that a few novels have, xp distribution is also a bit questionable. I feel like author could have benefitted from just making it a system novel with a gate system like “super gene” My best suggestion to you author would be find a friend you trust to give an honest opinion and make him proof read it a little bit