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SociableHermitLv45yr
2019-05-03 09:40

First off, this review was made as part of a review exchange, but I aim to be as fair as possible. I read up to Chapter 18: Ayato. Let's get into details. Writing Quality: Overall found the quality to be decent. Especially early on, there are quite a few errors and some sentence constructions don't work too well, but things get much better after only a few chapters. Later on, the style is mostly solid and functional with occasional moments of brilliance and occasional strange constructions. Stability of Updates: This category means nothing. It only incentivices sloppy, mediocre stories filled with clickbait titles and cliffhangers. I'll just stick a default five in here I guess. Story Development: For now, the story is mostly your generic magic academy harem plot, with few deviations. If you like that kind of story then welcome, and please enjoy your stay. This one's right up your alley. It's personally not my style, but I still graded the story high. The reason is that I love the author's unique use of structure, jumping back and forth through time to tell a more compelling tale. The chapters about the futures definitely intrigued me and drew me in much better than the generic plot. Character design: The characters are... very anime. By which I mean everyone has pretty much one set character trait which is then heightened to the extreme. It can be an entertaining style to do characters, but it's not for me, so only 3 stars here. World Background: Without spoilering anything, the world is maybe the most interesting part of the story. It's obvious that the author took a lot of time coming up with details for the plot. While there are several beats repeated from other, similar stories, it has lots of new things to discover, especially below the surface, which I found great. Unfortunately, the author is pretty heavy-handed with the exposition sometimes. While I do enjoy the world, reading three paragraphs of worldbuilding without any deeper context for the immediate story was a bit tiring. Overall, C: Summoner and Magic is an enjoyable, fast-paced magic academy story with some hidden depth just below the surface. If you are into anime-style characters or fast-to-sttrong storylines, this one might just be for you.

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When reviewing, I always give each category one extra star to the score, save for newbie writers to whom I give two. Writing Quality 5: I only noticed some small errors such as forgetting apostrophes or not capitalized "I", but nothing too serious. Stability of Updates 5: Personally, I don't like this category, as sometimes the writer needs more time to finish up a chapter, but may end up sacrificing the quality to keep the release rate, so I always give it a 5. And yes, I mostly copypasted this category from my previous reviews and will do the same with future ones. Story Development 3: The story flows well and there are some exciting moments but it never really managed to engage me. If I had to guess why, I would say it was the clichés, which made me feel I've read this story before. Lots of them crumped together, especially at the beginning. You have the loli imouto who is in love with her --NOT blood related-- brother. The harsh, loli teacher who --is not clear yet, but probably-- is actually an *****. The magical battle high school to train students against demon beasts. Underestimated MC and random mobs whose only function is to belittle and later to awe at MC's actions. To be clear, I don't think cliches are necessarily bad, as they give a sense of familiarity to the reader, which allows them to focus on other parts of the story. Unfortunately, these other parts also didn't make me engaged. Character Design 2: I didn't particularly like or dislike the story aspect. This one though... The characters are mostly generic, showing little to no personality. The MC is bland, though not as much as Ayato, the non-threatening male "friend". His other “friend” is Akane, the Osananajimi who recognizes the MC while he initially doesn't remember her. As for the quotation marks, it’s because even calling them friends seem to be a bit of a stretch. That’s because most of their interactions are just there to advance the plot. The other characters aren’t any better, with only Miyuki being mildly interesting. World Background 4: The world is well detailed, but the way said details are told could be improved. The world building is done mostly through infodumps, which can make the reader skip through it or lose interest. A tip would be to cut out as much as you can and spread the rest through the story. Another would be to add the character’s thoughts or opinions in between. Not only it will break the feeling of reading a wall of text, as it will also provide good opportunities to show more of the character’s personality. Review score (5+5+3+2+4)/5 = 3.8 Score given = (5+5+4+3+5)/5 = 4.4

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