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EarthGames
EarthGamesLv115yr
2019-11-02 06:50

Overall a good storry, but it has it´s faults as well. First of all the characters, the main character is the only one who we get to know really, the rest just apear for a couple of chapters and become irelevant rather quickly. He rarely has conversations with people that last more than a couple of sentences, it would be nice to increase his relations and interactions with the people arround him. (Idon´t know your future plans so maybe this is already planed) furthermore the mc is becoming more and more powerful physically but he doesn´t show much emotion other than his strict planing. I mean he has crazy high iteligence but everybody has his faults, there are no perfect people. The story development is solely focused on the mc and where he goes, there are some mentions and short pov´s of the villains but nothing major yet. It would be nice to learn more about the backhround and everthing that is going on arround him. The aspect of world background is in my opinion pretty good overall. The only problem I have is that we know where he is, what he does but not much more. We rarely get decriptions of his suroundings or other stuff like this. As a final note, this is my first review of any kind of storry I´v read. So this it probably rather subjective and partly wrong so read it yourself. It is a great story if you like story with an insanely powerful mc who gets stronger and strong in short period of time. Finaly to the author: please try to increase the chapter length, your story is great but it would be even better with longer chapters, this way we as readers can imerse ourselfes more and not just read 5 minutes or so each day and forget what happened the next. P.S. English isn´t my first language so go easy on my gramar

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LightningAsura
LightningAsuraAuthor

Regarding the chapters being small, I'm planning on increasing release rate in two days to triple/double chapters per day so its 15~10 mins per day now :")

shelwyn
shelwynLv15

Dont die bro, don't know how many monster energy u need 2 drink for 3 chapters a day but RIP in peace author just in case.

LightningAsura:Regarding the chapters being small, I'm planning on increasing release rate in two days to triple/double chapters per day so its 15~10 mins per day now :")
LightningAsura
LightningAsuraAuthor

Lol, I will try not to >.>

shelwyn:Dont die bro, don't know how many monster energy u need 2 drink for 3 chapters a day but RIP in peace author just in case.
ZedukelStarstryker
ZedukelStarstrykerLv12

Everything sounds fine, guess its gonna be a good read :D

Aoalbjorn
AoalbjornLv3

Its better than introducing characters and mc being intimate with them and then forgetting about them. its better to not get intimate and forget them. its the way omni lord. You should know even if characters are kept by his side they wont be able to help him since his growth rate is of an MC. An unparalleled genius being lonely is more realistic.

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