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ArticReaper
ArticReaperLv134yr
2020-11-15 13:32

I'm writing this in order to get author attention, cause I'm too lazy to write novels so I'll just leave some of my novel ideas here... so in the beginning there was only darkness that infinitly gatherd until a single point, after countless millinema the darkness suddenly bursts leaving a blank space. that's where light is, light is the after affect of there being nothing in the void, and after the light formed it clashed with the void creating things like particles, Mana, more light, new elements created when the two combine. the theses things also create particles, and Mana, creating chaos. they also started to compress creating will, and thru will created primordial deities, and those deities ( who only know to compress their elements as they are like really ingnorant ) restrained there elements and compressed them to make them denser and denser, into it explodes as creating stars and planets and the like giving birth to more elements, and so on. that's what been on my mind, but the thing to take note of here, is that there is only one law and that is {COMPRESSION}. so authors out there if you see this I hope there is some inspiration or insight, even though the grammer is horrible.

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ArticReaperLv13

dang my writing is really bad

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