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Demitius
DemitiusLv45yr
2019-08-12 11:10

This story is Awesome. It could easily become a top 10 original novel on this site in my mind. The only issue keeping this story back from being one of the best? Grammar. The Author appears to be using Machine Translations to translate this story leaving it full of terrible Grammar. At least the spelling is on point. If the author had an English speaking Editor go through this it will rapidly rise in the rankings. But as is? This story will turn newcomers off really REALLY fast. The grammar is just that horrendous. people even defend the author talking about how he/she has no obligation to better his grammar. Then he paywalls it?

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goodlion
goodlionAuthor

I'm trying to solve this with an editor, but the values I've found so far for paid editors are very high and I can't afford it, but I will keep trying to find one with the lowest budget, so I ask readers' patience.

Demitius
DemitiusLv4

Wish you Luck in finding a promising deal. This story is seriously good literally made me start looking for other basketball stories on this site. Just remember your overall story so far is pretty damn good. Another issue while I have your attention is mostly your characters height in the earlier chapters. as someone from the U.S. living in an area were our school is one of the least physically gifted(every school in our league had 2-3 6'5(1.95) besides us we had 2. Then one decided to play baseball only.) we had numerous people on our Basketball team over 6ft(1.85m). A 6 footer in middle school would most likely play center. a 6 footer in high school would be a Guard or a Forward. Now I know this isn't likely to change but I hope this would give you some sort of perspective on American high school physical stature's. Also the poor man sport in America isn't Futbol/soccer it's Basketball. you could go pay $5 for a ball and then go to any primary/middle/high school in America and they would have a basketball hoop.

Chenglei
ChengleiLv11

Can't you ask for a volunteer? I'm sure there are plenty of people who would be willing to help you out. Your story is amazing.

goodlion:I'm trying to solve this with an editor, but the values I've found so far for paid editors are very high and I can't afford it, but I will keep trying to find one with the lowest budget, so I ask readers' patience.
goodlion
goodlionAuthor

I've already asked for volunteers, but it's hard to find people who have time to help

Chenglei:Can't you ask for a volunteer? I'm sure there are plenty of people who would be willing to help you out. Your story is amazing.
Chenglei
ChengleiLv11

Oh, yeah. That's true :(

goodlion:I've already asked for volunteers, but it's hard to find people who have time to help
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