The grammar and update stability is amazing, but the story and character development? Nope, this novel might be good for the newbies, but for those who have seen lots of novel(like me) this novel is not that good? Below average I would say, every female character literally got horny by just seeing the mc’s face, which bring us to mc. He’s a neet, but when he got transported he immediately kill people without emotion, then at chapter 7-8? He’s already raping woman, acting like a spoiled young master who thinks he could get anything he wants. I don’t know why this have a high reviews(probably newbies reader) but for those who expect a mature mc, plot, etc then don’t read this or you’ll be disappointed. Enough of the criticism, the author did an amazing job nonetheless, I think what you should do(Author) is read books and learn from them.
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Thanks for the feedback. I do have to ask since you seem to be very knowledgable about this kinds of things.... what should have been the MC's actions? Please take note that the Story environment is in a Post-Apocaliptic world. This is a free for all scenario, the morals that we follow in a civilized world does not apply here. Every single person in this book aside from Adam already went through the horrors of savagery and zombie threat for years. Slavery? Depravity? Rape? Murder? Such words are synonymous in a Post-Apocalypse themed story. I'm not sure if those tags are not part of the Novels that you've "seen" with a category like "Post-Apocalypse". Maybe if I've read some of the stories you've "seen", I could have written my story differently. Maybe on the first hundred chapters I would tell all my readers that in a post apocaliptic world the MC drank tea all day and swim in the beach during sunset. I might have added white picket fences and a 9 to 5 job for the MC too. I could have made the MC agrue with his mom that the color or his shirt does not match the color of his pants so he cant leave the house. Unfortunately, this is my story. I dont like those kind of sissy stories you've "seen". If the you're saying that the stories you've "seen" so far does not include those themes them their category should have been different. There is no sense of making MY story the same as the other hundreds of other sissy stories you've "seen" so far. I write the things that I think will happen if I have that kind of an ability in that kind of post apocalyptic environment. By the way, having that kind of power...... Yes! you can get and do whatever you want. What do you expect, should the police to show up because he killed people in CHAPTER 7? I think you would rather the MC escape right? What kind of a lame story would that be? A guy created a story about this OP character and the first thing the character do is flee. Just imagine the kind of response I would get from that sissy move. Wait maybe you expect the MC to let himself be caught? Yeah, I could have build the MC's character and peronality by letting him get ass raped by the slavers huh. Anyways, thanks for the review. I just dont see your point. Maybe you can point it out some more using you vast experience "seeing" other novels. Novices like us are so eager to learn from someone as knowledgable as you. ^^
You’re right about the mc, I actually have no problem when he kills, what ticks me off is when he kill he doesn’t show any remorse, like he’s a neet and not a soldier. He should be a bit hesitant and let him grow as a merciless mc, and no i have seen lots of apocalyptic world stories where the mc grow, not instantly merciless without any reason. And you said the moral and things have gone to drain and only the mc is from the modern world? That’s exactly what i’m saying, he’s from another world where killing is not norm and could be punished severely, but he just killed without any reason, i’d be impress if he actually has a past, like being a soldier or something that requires to kill people, but i’m gonna say it again, he’s a neet. The other thing, the girls. They don’t have personality, it’s true that it’s apocalyptic world, but they just throw their body to mc. Mc captured their heart by doing...nothing, literally. He just fcks them and they fall in love, and please don’t consider this hate review, I like this story so i criticise you to make the story better, but as of now, nothing new just the normal below average story.
HellionPrime:Thanks for the feedback. I do have to ask since you seem to be very knowledgable about this kinds of things.... what should have been the MC's actions? Please take note that the Story environment is in a Post-Apocaliptic world. This is a free for all scenario, the morals that we follow in a civilized world does not apply here. Every single person in this book aside from Adam already went through the horrors of savagery and zombie threat for years. Slavery? Depravity? Rape? Murder? Such words are synonymous in a Post-Apocalypse themed story. I'm not sure if those tags are not part of the Novels that you've "seen" with a category like "Post-Apocalypse". Maybe if I've read some of the stories you've "seen", I could have written my story differently. Maybe on the first hundred chapters I would tell all my readers that in a post apocaliptic world the MC drank tea all day and swim in the beach during sunset. I might have added white picket fences and a 9 to 5 job for the MC too. I could have made the MC agrue with his mom that the color or his shirt does not match the color of his pants so he cant leave the house. Unfortunately, this is my story. I dont like those kind of sissy stories you've "seen". If the you're saying that the stories you've "seen" so far does not include those themes them their category should have been different. There is no sense of making MY story the same as the other hundreds of other sissy stories you've "seen" so far. I write the things that I think will happen if I have that kind of an ability in that kind of post apocalyptic environment. By the way, having that kind of power...... Yes! you can get and do whatever you want. What do you expect, should the police to show up because he killed people in CHAPTER 7? I think you would rather the MC escape right? What kind of a lame story would that be? A guy created a story about this OP character and the first thing the character do is flee. Just imagine the kind of response I would get from that sissy move. Wait maybe you expect the MC to let himself be caught? Yeah, I could have build the MC's character and peronality by letting him get ass raped by the slavers huh. Anyways, thanks for the review. I just dont see your point. Maybe you can point it out some more using you vast experience "seeing" other novels. Novices like us are so eager to learn from someone as knowledgable as you. ^^
You’re right about the mc, I actually have no problem when he kills, what ticks me off is when he kill he doesn’t show any remorse, like he’s a neet and not a soldier. He should be a bit hesitant and let him grow as a merciless mc, and no i have seen lots of apocalyptic world stories where the mc grow, not instantly merciless without any reason. And you said the moral and things have gone to drain and only the mc is from the modern world? That’s exactly what i’m saying, he’s from another world where killing is not norm and could be punished severely, but he just killed without any reason, i’d be impress if he actually has a past, like being a soldier or something that requires to kill people, but i’m gonna say it again, he’s a neet. The other thing, the girls. They don’t have personality, it’s true that it’s apocalyptic world, but they just throw their body to mc. Mc captured their heart by doing...nothing, literally. He just fcks them and they fall in love, and please don’t consider this hate review, I like this story so i criticise you to make the story better, but as of now, nothing new just the normal below average story.
HellionPrime:Thanks for the feedback. I do have to ask since you seem to be very knowledgable about this kinds of things.... what should have been the MC's actions? Please take note that the Story environment is in a Post-Apocaliptic world. This is a free for all scenario, the morals that we follow in a civilized world does not apply here. Every single person in this book aside from Adam already went through the horrors of savagery and zombie threat for years. Slavery? Depravity? Rape? Murder? Such words are synonymous in a Post-Apocalypse themed story. I'm not sure if those tags are not part of the Novels that you've "seen" with a category like "Post-Apocalypse". Maybe if I've read some of the stories you've "seen", I could have written my story differently. Maybe on the first hundred chapters I would tell all my readers that in a post apocaliptic world the MC drank tea all day and swim in the beach during sunset. I might have added white picket fences and a 9 to 5 job for the MC too. I could have made the MC agrue with his mom that the color or his shirt does not match the color of his pants so he cant leave the house. Unfortunately, this is my story. I dont like those kind of sissy stories you've "seen". If the you're saying that the stories you've "seen" so far does not include those themes them their category should have been different. There is no sense of making MY story the same as the other hundreds of other sissy stories you've "seen" so far. I write the things that I think will happen if I have that kind of an ability in that kind of post apocalyptic environment. By the way, having that kind of power...... Yes! you can get and do whatever you want. What do you expect, should the police to show up because he killed people in CHAPTER 7? I think you would rather the MC escape right? What kind of a lame story would that be? A guy created a story about this OP character and the first thing the character do is flee. Just imagine the kind of response I would get from that sissy move. Wait maybe you expect the MC to let himself be caught? Yeah, I could have build the MC's character and peronality by letting him get ass raped by the slavers huh. Anyways, thanks for the review. I just dont see your point. Maybe you can point it out some more using you vast experience "seeing" other novels. Novices like us are so eager to learn from someone as knowledgable as you. ^^
Summary of my review: mc is too merciless in the beginning the story without any explanation, girls personality is one dimensional, writing and update stability is amazing, way better than a lot of author.
Ikkarus:You’re right about the mc, I actually have no problem when he kills, what ticks me off is when he kill he doesn’t show any remorse, like he’s a neet and not a soldier. He should be a bit hesitant and let him grow as a merciless mc, and no i have seen lots of apocalyptic world stories where the mc grow, not instantly merciless without any reason. And you said the moral and things have gone to drain and only the mc is from the modern world? That’s exactly what i’m saying, he’s from another world where killing is not norm and could be punished severely, but he just killed without any reason, i’d be impress if he actually has a past, like being a soldier or something that requires to kill people, but i’m gonna say it again, he’s a neet. The other thing, the girls. They don’t have personality, it’s true that it’s apocalyptic world, but they just throw their body to mc. Mc captured their heart by doing...nothing, literally. He just fcks them and they fall in love, and please don’t consider this hate review, I like this story so i criticise you to make the story better, but as of now, nothing new just the normal below average story.
Summary of my review: mc is too merciless in the beginning the story without any explanation, girls personality is one dimensional, writing and update stability is amazing, way better than a lot of author.
Ikkarus:You’re right about the mc, I actually have no problem when he kills, what ticks me off is when he kill he doesn’t show any remorse, like he’s a neet and not a soldier. He should be a bit hesitant and let him grow as a merciless mc, and no i have seen lots of apocalyptic world stories where the mc grow, not instantly merciless without any reason. And you said the moral and things have gone to drain and only the mc is from the modern world? That’s exactly what i’m saying, he’s from another world where killing is not norm and could be punished severely, but he just killed without any reason, i’d be impress if he actually has a past, like being a soldier or something that requires to kill people, but i’m gonna say it again, he’s a neet. The other thing, the girls. They don’t have personality, it’s true that it’s apocalyptic world, but they just throw their body to mc. Mc captured their heart by doing...nothing, literally. He just fcks them and they fall in love, and please don’t consider this hate review, I like this story so i criticise you to make the story better, but as of now, nothing new just the normal below average story.
Read the Author's note right under the Sypnosis ya Dunce,everything you've just complained has already been said in advance by the author himself.
It wasn’t there when i put this review so aint gonna remove it
MonstrousBirdOfQin:Read the Author's note right under the Sypnosis ya Dunce,everything you've just complained has already been said in advance by the author himself.
That's on him then.
Ikkarus:It wasn’t there when i put this review so aint gonna remove it
Yeh, now i seems like a hater🤦🏻♂️😂
MonstrousBirdOfQin:That's on him then.
No! I put it there because I saw the your point. And for the record. He is not a hater guys. ^^
Hmm make sense,
Hmm make sense,
