v nice finally a fan pic without broly or goku as MC =) plz continue even if it is 1ch/week 140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140

Grammar is good. One of the few fanfics that don't have the MC become OP right off the bat, and thereby removing all suspense from the novel. Unfortunately, much of the story is made of exposition. Ex: Vegeta wished for Bardock to come back to life, and he appeared on the planet That's the typical thing you can find in the story, versus: Ex: Vegeta voiced his wish, and as the dragon Porunga roared, motes of light slowly gathered together forming first a cell, and then bone, before being wrapped in blood and flesh. Bardock had been reborn. So the first example just tells us what happens, i.e. exposition. The 2nd example shows us in a vivid, descriptive manner a scene which forms in front of our eyes. This is the stuff that's found in great books.

was good until arthor did a crossover with the other fanfic it’s bs that you did that ruined the story in my opinion also power scaling is way off i don’t care if other mc had a system there is no way in the naruto world

I'm Here!!! For a review!!! • Writing Quality = 4 star, why? No reason, everyone can improve, and you my friend is an awesome writer. • Stability of Updating = 5 star, Why? On the day I'm writing this review, you released 2-3 new chapter, I don't know if it's like that daily but I do know how hard it is to write a dam.n chapter so If you released 2 or more chapters in a day then that's godly...for my stamdard. XD • Story development = 2 Star, Why so low?? I'm writing this review when im in the middle of the Cell games and I just couldn't continue. A few years of training = A human with 10++ Quadrillion power level?? So talent is basically non existant here(Imagine Frieza training with them. LMFAO they wouldn't be able to keep up!) and thats what make it bland for me. When I was reading a fight it always came down to who have the higher number's win which is kinda predictable. The plot is So-so and the MC at this point is A Vegeta with future knowledge and less prideful instead of a man reincarnated 'as' Vegeta (that's different). No matter what training they do, that purple man will pull out something amd *Baam* he have someone strong as them.. • Character Design = 3 star, why? Like I said above at this point the MC is Vegeta with future knowledge and less prideful instead of a reincarnated man in Vegeta's body. • World background = 3 star, average. I dont think this is important, because its DBZ universe and world background is already been stablished. Overall not as great as other reviews make it out to be, it's nice for a casual read, when you suddenly have an urge to read a powerful MC and everything will go their way. Oh it didn't? Pulls out the Dragon's balls! I rate 5/10

Five star just for that godly fan art . . . . . 😸😸😸😸😸😸😸😸😸😸😸 😸😸😸😸😸😸 😸😸😸😸😸😸😸 😸😸😸😸😸😸 😸😸😸😸😸😸 😸😸😸😸😸 😸 😸 😸 😸😸😸😸😸😸😸😸

"The Main Character is unexpectedly killed by God, and as an apology for his blunder..." This is how far I had to read, to realize the story is garbage. ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,, ,mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm

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You have made such an amazing novel that i just can't get enough xD it's hard to find such great novels, that keep you enticed and super focused on the story, it just keeps inviting you again and again and before you know it you've finished the chapters that you were accumulating for such a long time and want more xD honestly great job man!! Keep up the great work ^^ Sincerely, one of your biggest fans !!

It's good, you should read it. NO, seriously stop reading this review, just go read the chapters. Why are you still here? Go read the novel. Are you still here? Then don't forget to use power stone ..

Yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes. I waited for a dbz one from you author. Another great one, keep up the good work.