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dusty_angel
dusty_angelLv46yr
2019-04-16 22:35

Sorry for the late review! I’ve been a bit busy these past few days. Please forgive this lowly one. I have so many review swaps in queue now. orz Anyways, back to business! Writing Quality: 4/5 Overall, the writing and grammar is pretty good. There are only a few things I want to point out. The author needs to keep the verb tenses consistent. Most of the time, she uses past tense, but then she switches to present tense sometimes. The author also needs to capitalize plural nouns such as Snow Kingdom and Queen of Snow. Sometimes they are capitalized, sometimes they aren’t. Update Stability: 5/5 Nothing to complain here. As a writer myself, I admire how often the author is able to update! Keep up the good work! Story Development: 5/5 The pacing of the story isn’t too fast or too slow. There is a sense of mystery behind the story. Me likey. Character Design: 4/5 The character dialogues are very natural, and the interactions are very authentic. I would like some more imagery though. It was kind d hard to create an image of each character with just dialogue. World Background: 4/5 I’m still kind of vague about the history from the world, but it is slowly unfolding as the plot plays out. I’m interested in learning more about the world.

Queen Lyn: Clash Of Kingdoms

XOMatsumaeohana
4.8
268 Chs

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XOMatsumaeohana
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😲 Thank you for reminding me, some of the verbs were mixed up in the start since I didn't edit the chapters. 😅 Yeah this is my first fantasy novel so I didn't know about capitalizing Snow Kingdom and Mist Kingdom stuff until much later. 😊 Glad you still gave my novel a shot.

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