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HNatsu
HNatsuLv45yr
2019-02-24 06:11

Review Valid Till Chapter 6 Story development: While this is still a relatively new story, I can tell that the author has already developed a stable plot line. So far were in the introduction chapters and the main cast are slowly appearing. From the chapters so far, bits and pieces of the "danger" is showing up. Nothing too major is being revealed, allowing us readers to develop questions and ideas. Character design: The female lead Queen Lyn, in contrast to the others previous story Dream star. The strong side of the female lead is presented first. Queen Lyn's background, her knights and the people in her kingdom - are all well thought out and developed. While it's too soon to judge the other characters, I trust this author regarding character development. Writing Quality: If you want a story with good grammar, then read XOMatsumaeohana stories. While there's the occasions typo, that anyone makes. Her grammar and writing style is a lot more fluent than most stories you find on the site. Stability of updates: Since this is still a new story, no release schedule yet. But this is quite a lot of chapters already for a new story.

Queen Lyn: Clash Of Kingdoms

XOMatsumaeohana
4.8
268 Chs

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XOMatsumaeohana
XOMatsumaeohanaAuthor

҉ ٩(❊>∀<❊)۶҉҉ Thank you for the detailed review, much appreciated. ٩(❊>∀<❊)۶҉

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Finally the author review. Hello everyone this is XOMatsumaeohana, this story will be written alongside Dream Star so the updates won't be as frequent. But there will be chapters every week. This story is set in the year 4019, and I'm using a different calender/month system since it's magic realism. This story was started as roles being assigned amongst friends on a discord server, so yes the main cast are based of actual users on WN/discord. It's been awhile for me since I last magic realism genre/fantasy, so I hope you bear with me and point out any confusing or parts that need to be explained. Lastly, the cover was made by me. It's 1000% my drawing, so if you see it being used anywhere. Please let me know. ҉ ٩(❊>∀<❊)۶҉ Hope you enjoy the story.

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New Author review (additional information) • new cover photo is a image found on pin-interest and edited by me. • Plan to have 500-600 Chapters, word count is between 900-1.5K (sometimes higher depending) •Update: 2-3 Updates (vary) (UK timezone) • Official discord -> https://discord.gg/9Cwt9Jz

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√ Once again dear author XOMatsumaeohana surprises us with yet another brilliant story. I like how distinctly different this story is with her other one despite having the romance genre. Though the setting is different than her old one and that may explain the difference. The romance here is written more subtly, it's not overdone in anyway and seemed to just fit perfectly. Though I mainly read for the romance, the magical realism aspect interests me. And I want to see how these mysteries unfold.

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