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HNatsu
HNatsuLv46yr
2019-02-24 06:11

Review Valid Till Chapter 6 Story development: While this is still a relatively new story, I can tell that the author has already developed a stable plot line. So far were in the introduction chapters and the main cast are slowly appearing. From the chapters so far, bits and pieces of the "danger" is showing up. Nothing too major is being revealed, allowing us readers to develop questions and ideas. Character design: The female lead Queen Lyn, in contrast to the others previous story Dream star. The strong side of the female lead is presented first. Queen Lyn's background, her knights and the people in her kingdom - are all well thought out and developed. While it's too soon to judge the other characters, I trust this author regarding character development. Writing Quality: If you want a story with good grammar, then read XOMatsumaeohana stories. While there's the occasions typo, that anyone makes. Her grammar and writing style is a lot more fluent than most stories you find on the site. Stability of updates: Since this is still a new story, no release schedule yet. But this is quite a lot of chapters already for a new story.

Queen Lyn: Clash Of Kingdoms

XOMatsumaeohana
4.8
268 Chs

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XOMatsumaeohana
XOMatsumaeohanaAuthor

҉ ٩(❊>∀<❊)۶҉҉ Thank you for the detailed review, much appreciated. ٩(❊>∀<❊)۶҉

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I've read the authors previous work dream star, and now I'm fascinated to see what she can do with this type of setting. It's unlike her previous romance novel set in modern times; and yet she seems to grasp the romance concept better here. The update stability seems stable the last few days, while I have a few chapters to catch up on. I'm liking where the story is going so far. Keep up the good WOR.

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Finally the author review. Hello everyone this is XOMatsumaeohana, this story will be written alongside Dream Star so the updates won't be as frequent. But there will be chapters every week. This story is set in the year 4019, and I'm using a different calender/month system since it's magic realism. This story was started as roles being assigned amongst friends on a discord server, so yes the main cast are based of actual users on WN/discord. It's been awhile for me since I last magic realism genre/fantasy, so I hope you bear with me and point out any confusing or parts that need to be explained. Lastly, the cover was made by me. It's 1000% my drawing, so if you see it being used anywhere. Please let me know. ҉ ٩(❊>∀<❊)۶҉ Hope you enjoy the story.

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I think the writing style is good and having read dream star I am curious at what can miss XOmatsumaeohana do with a magic realism setting. I am pretty sure that those who start reading this will get hooked in it

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New Author review (additional information) • new cover photo is a image found on pin-interest and edited by me. • Plan to have 500-600 Chapters, word count is between 900-1.5K (sometimes higher depending) •Update: 2-3 Updates (vary) (UK timezone) • Official discord -> https://discord.gg/9Cwt9Jz

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√ Once again dear author XOMatsumaeohana surprises us with yet another brilliant story. I like how distinctly different this story is with her other one despite having the romance genre. Though the setting is different than her old one and that may explain the difference. The romance here is written more subtly, it's not overdone in anyway and seemed to just fit perfectly. Though I mainly read for the romance, the magical realism aspect interests me. And I want to see how these mysteries unfold.

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My thoughts on the first chapter. While there's only one chapter out, I'm really liking the story and plot line. The author other work dream star really caught my attention because of how she focuses/describes character thoughts well. So I guarantee that the character development will be good here too.

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with 29 chapters out, I can give a solid review. If you've read XOMatsumaeohana previous works Dream Star and expect the same complicated plot line. Then think again, this novel is completely unlike Dream Star. Perhaps due to the historical/magical realism element but even the romance here is written subtly and not overdone. She has fleshed out the main characters and the secondary cast is used well, not overshadowing the main characters (I think you can change King Allen to main cast, he appears quite frequently) Since we're still on volume 1 nothing too significant has happened yet. However, the pacing is good. I'm glad the author decided not to rush into the dispute with the snow kingdom; and is focusing on building up the plot first. The mysteries of King kazuya, King Allen's feelings. Why her knights are being targeted? Her knights appear to have complex backgrounds, is this all just a coincidence? I'm looking forward to seeing how this story ends up.

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