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linqin77
linqin77Lv145yr
2019-08-14 22:18

(I will start with the positive critics before the negative ones. 😉) No lie, at the beginning of this novel I was like "this is gonna be a drag 😫" but I'm glad I didn't drop it. It didn't take me long to be hooked. Reading this novel has made me realise that I have overrated *a lot* of novels. I am amazed how the writer mixed many controversial ideas into this...and make it a bomb without making everything jumbled up or confusing. Like how? I couldn't drop my phone after I began reading this novel. I would not be surprised if he was a professional writer. Psychological comedy drama romance revenge rebirth action undercover mystery .... The theme list goes on and on. The diversity not only lied in the themes but also the culture, depicted in the plot and setting...it has been well joined no gaps at all. Most novels on this platform are kind of predictable when it came to the romance, but here, all my guesses kept on being shut down and unlike the others, the romance is so sweet sexy and pure at the same time. I have been amazed There is no overlap in the characters which is quite common, since it is difficult to create and present completely different personas when writing. It's easy to mix them up or end up loosing the depth of the character. But surprisingly the writer pulled it off! The novel is no lie a great one it has potential to be best selling, as in yes it can enter the market...and I would buy it! It has potential to even be produced into series or anime without doubt. But there is room for improvement. For example, the "warnings" about the content having possible violence or sexual content destroys the flow of the novel. Like am enjoying the book, am so into it and then boom these sentences that are not even part of the story jump out of my face like what on earth? I suggest they use icons on the chapters themselves to warn readers and possible mature content so we don't have to waste..er I mean delay our interaction with the characters. Like I came across a whole paragraph *during* the *climax* of the story warning me about possible mature content! 😠 like did you have to use half of my screen with something you can use a symbol for? And please make Kyle bisexual 🙈 Hehehe

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PsyberRose
PsyberRoseAuthor

Aaaaa! I'm utterly speechless. Thank you so much for your wonderful review. (*/▽\*) Noted on the 'warnings' bit. I was worried cuz I found out there are some young readers and some who are a bit averse to such scenes. From now on, I'll just have the warnings in the Author's Note, and then put a [R18] label on the title - leave the chapter alone from any more warnings so you don't waste ... er, delay your interaction with the characters. hee hee And yes, Kyle is bisexual. (*⸰‿-)

linqin77
linqin77Lv14

You are the best! 🤗 I will be looking for the eye "Kyle-Candy" Hehehe 😋 keep it up... My heart is relying on you now From your little fan 🐾

PsyberRose:Aaaaa! I'm utterly speechless. Thank you so much for your wonderful review. (*/▽\*) Noted on the 'warnings' bit. I was worried cuz I found out there are some young readers and some who are a bit averse to such scenes. From now on, I'll just have the warnings in the Author's Note, and then put a [R18] label on the title - leave the chapter alone from any more warnings so you don't waste ... er, delay your interaction with the characters. hee hee And yes, Kyle is bisexual. (*⸰‿-)
linqin77
linqin77Lv14

You are the best! 🤗 I will be looking for the eye "Kyle-Candy" Hehehe 😋 keep it up... My heart is relying on you now From your little fan 🐾

PsyberRose:Aaaaa! I'm utterly speechless. Thank you so much for your wonderful review. (*/▽\*) Noted on the 'warnings' bit. I was worried cuz I found out there are some young readers and some who are a bit averse to such scenes. From now on, I'll just have the warnings in the Author's Note, and then put a [R18] label on the title - leave the chapter alone from any more warnings so you don't waste ... er, delay your interaction with the characters. hee hee And yes, Kyle is bisexual. (*⸰‿-)
PsyberRose
PsyberRoseAuthor

😍💖

Eliza_Belle_Gray
Eliza_Belle_GrayLv4

I wish I have you brain and hands because I wanted to write this long too...XD

linqin77
linqin77Lv14

😂😂I think I just got overexcited...but thanks... I'm sure you can also 😉

Eliza_Belle_Gray:I wish I have you brain and hands because I wanted to write this long too...XD
Eliza_Belle_Gray
Eliza_Belle_GrayLv4

I/m just lazy lol XD

linqin77:😂😂I think I just got overexcited...but thanks... I'm sure you can also 😉
Evilcommandereject
EvilcommanderejectLv14

I will check it out.

linqin77
linqin77Lv14

I hope you will like it

Evilcommandereject:I will check it out.
linqin77
linqin77Lv14

I hope you will like it

Evilcommandereject:I will check it out.
RedSonia
RedSoniaLv15

Oh, I love your review! 💖💖💖 If you have time, please please please... review my novel as well. As a beginner novelist, I really wish to get some constructive feedback. 😉👍 Note: I have two novels... My first one is 1000+ chapters and is premium, but first 120 chapters are free. (That is enough to get the idea about the storyline... Maybe...) My second novel has a better start (IMO), and it's relatively fresh...

linqin77
linqin77Lv14

I'll check it out 👍

RedSonia:Oh, I love your review! 💖💖💖 If you have time, please please please... review my novel as well. As a beginner novelist, I really wish to get some constructive feedback. 😉👍 Note: I have two novels... My first one is 1000+ chapters and is premium, but first 120 chapters are free. (That is enough to get the idea about the storyline... Maybe...) My second novel has a better start (IMO), and it's relatively fresh...
chris_dickson
chris_dicksonLv1

Reading what i see its good blaw blaw chick turn to boy possible adventure feels like another slime or spider series that are out🤣 i think ill pass im a fan of dark fantasy genres system romance adventure gore rated R i like a part mc flips out an finds out his her worth an how to pass it a destroy all the barriers in there way kinda like deadpool killing the writers from killing him 🤩 i may try the book if it tickles my fancy 1 day

Axes
AxesLv5

I am not into yaoi content, may i ask if there are scenes/chapters of it? Because if there is then....... idk if i can read it.

PsyberRose:Aaaaa! I'm utterly speechless. Thank you so much for your wonderful review. (*/▽\*) Noted on the 'warnings' bit. I was worried cuz I found out there are some young readers and some who are a bit averse to such scenes. From now on, I'll just have the warnings in the Author's Note, and then put a [R18] label on the title - leave the chapter alone from any more warnings so you don't waste ... er, delay your interaction with the characters. hee hee And yes, Kyle is bisexual. (*⸰‿-)
PsyberRose
PsyberRoseAuthor

Yes, but you can skip them. Each chapter that has it would have a warning label and skipping it won't have you be lost in the story or plot. It occurs in the later volumes.

Axes:I am not into yaoi content, may i ask if there are scenes/chapters of it? Because if there is then....... idk if i can read it.
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JamesAnthony1999
JamesAnthony1999Lv14

This is a story I HAD to review. It was like part of me (a very big part) decided it was happening and when the lazy me started considering just putting it off until I eventually forgetting to write one (happens a lot) the first part pulled a figurative gun out and held the lazy part of my at figurative gunpoint to actually write a proper review. So let me first mention how I binge read this novel hard. I literally put all other novels on hold for 2 days and even had to force myself just go get my daily free SS from webnovel check in etc. The author does an amazing job describing scenes and stories. This honestly felt like I was drawn into on of my favourite tv shows or anime with how I just imagined everything in my head more than I felt I was actually reading, everything flows so well together it's as smooth as a dream would be. The storyline is so well thought out, the world building is thorough but not too much and the author doesn't dump info on you, it's like every couple chapters there's a line or a few where it feels like setting the scene for just that part of the story but each time it's like a puzzle piece building up the world gradually until you suddenly realise how much worldbuilding has been going on without you thinking about it. It sounds like there's a lot of world guiding going on but actually there's not much. Enough to tell you what you need and want to know, nothing more or less. Exactly what you need without giving you too much to think about or not enough to understand the world. Character development is so incredibly realistic and full of just pure raw emotions and some illogical moments that just make sense when thinking from the heart while others fit perfectly when thinking logically. The author just knows exactly how to mix the two perfectly and blend them together. At time focusing on one, then the other and sometimes switching between them quickly in relatable and amazingly way where it just flows and fits and makes so much sense for it to do so while drawing you into the story and the feelings and perspectives of the characters. I have almost 0 issues with the writing quality. I think maybe a rare mistake here or there but I was too drawn into the story and focused my mind just corrected anything wrong subconsciously so I could keep reading without pause just to keep enjoying the amazing read that this novel provides. When it comes so some worries some people (probably heterosexual guys like me) about possible male on male action then I can say as long as you aren't homophobic then you have nothing to worry about. It's not off putting in the least and worse case the author puts ample warning that allows you to skip anything you might be sensitive on. A couple things to say to the author! Firstly the parts of some "Creators thoughts" at the end of a few chapters where you apologised for possible filler. I CAN'T SEE ANY FILLER! To me a filler is anything that does not progress the story and just increases word count. This novel however is done so beautifully where everything has a purpose. Either giving information or an opinion/perspective a character that heels progress the plot or explains emotions and why characters act the way they do, it's done perfectly and to even consider these chapters being given that label of "Filler" is not giving the novel (and especially the author) nearly enough credit. Something an author once told me when I asked for writing tips was to reduce wasted words. If it doesn't need to be there and doesn't progress the story then delete it. I have yet to find a single wasted word in this novel and I doubt I ever will see a wasted word from this author as long as they continue to have the same passion for writing as they have now. Lastly I would like to say that this has got be one of my favourite novels yet and I cant wait for more chapters. Even if you aren't sure I ask you just sit down and read this novel for an hour. You won't regret it.

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