Well, 4.1 is overrated, mostly via Rating bots :(. From what I've seen, the author is from spain and writes in spanish and has little to zero english knowledge. His chapters are machine translated and some early and late ones are edited by another one with a little more english skills. Like most pseudo p*rn authors, the 18+ chapters are written by a virgin who gathered experience by watching po*n. Null Imagination, null seduction. MC gathers his harem members only by being strong. There is zero affection or romance. MC is also an irresponsible asshole. He is about 10 years away from home. Because of circumstances he was unable to return. His parents and brother are worried sick. But MC's thoughts about that are: I've sent them enough Money, they should be happy. So even when he returned, he let his family wait for anothersome weeks just to chase some more skirts. The MC starts as a likeable person with overly responsible behaviour and transforms with time into a typical chinese xianxia asshole MC that is meaninglessly arrogant and kills everyone he doesn't like. It is rather sad to see a Story, that started so promising only with bad grammar and is now at a point with relatively good grammar but shi*ty plot :( The characters have no noticeable personality. Girls see the MC and love him, boys admire or hate him - whatever is better for the plot. But there is nothing special about anyone. If one or two of his wives die, because the author forgets about them, you probably wouldn't even realize it. Writing Quality ** Stability of Updates ***** Story Development ** Character Design ** World Background **** average ***
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The story after the 11 time skip is absolute garbage
Yeah, the best part of the story is the cover picture. And that is probably just copied from ***.
My friend, I'm reading this because mostly I love system fanfics and don't really get two shits about quality as I am just trying to look through everything so that I can write one possibly in the future and find some ideas or mistakes not to make and you have helped me. I keep reading these 18+ novels and always thought the scenes were weird and as they were all the same I didn't really pay any mind to it but you pointed it out while giving me a giving me a good laugh, thank you.
My friend, I'm reading this because mostly I love system fanfics and don't really get two shits about quality as I am just trying to look through everything so that I can write one possibly in the future and find some ideas or mistakes not to make and you have helped me. I keep reading these 18+ novels and always thought the scenes were weird and as they were all the same I didn't really pay any mind to it but you pointed it out while giving me a giving me a good laugh, thank you.
Well, than I hope, that you'll give the chars some personality and individuality. That's mostly lacking in system fanfics. That was the part, that I liked most in "NEET receives a Dating Sim System". But at the end, the author completely forgot about his system's skills... Well, show me how it works and send the name of your work as soon as you release it.
