Only read up to chapter 10. Grammar could use improvement. Inconsistant time sequencing, jumping around w/ no real flow. Author doesn’t delve beyond the surface of any character, including the Mc. Despite Mc supposing to have the mind of an old man, he doesn’t show the wisdom of even an *****. Has sex w/ another character randomly, completely out of nowhere w/ no lead up. This character was introduced a paragraph before you find out they have sex. When the author addresses this, it is supposed to be assumed by the reader that this grandpa has mad game, conquering a woman who works in customer service presumably for years in a span of a conversation, and naturally both parties have no mixed feelings about randomly f**king and then saying “bye have a nice life”, never to meet again. Like, hah??? Unless your looking to invest in the long hall and hope it gets better, there is far better stories and **** on this website, would not recommend this work in the slightest. Oh and in the very first fight his pokemon uses more than 4 moves. Like WTF, this Gramps reincarnated after being beaten over the head by a gameshark or some s**t.
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real life pokemon would have more than four moves the four moves thing is game only
thx man for giving a honest review iam enjoying at first and yes the smut come out of nowhere but i drop this novel long ago when i've seen the mc just having a séx then say "bye have a nice life" i ask the most like reviewer if theres a harem but no one reply so i take upon myself to drop this novel before regret consume me later on
bruh *** sense are in 100 to 200 chap layer it get better. not much *** sense after that. you can skip the *** sense if you want that it nothing will change plot of this story.
what a bunch of A holes.....brats
bruh, do you have any brain cells left?
Yomama2point:bruh *** sense are in 100 to 200 chap layer it get better. not much *** sense after that. you can skip the *** sense if you want that it nothing will change plot of this story.
yeah, granda.
Acsmaster007:what a bunch of A holes.....brats
im not not reading something that would take me 100 to 200 chapters to appreciate. why not just summarized chapter 1 to 200 into 1 to 10 chapters and then many more might read it
Yomama2point:bruh *** sense are in 100 to 200 chap layer it get better. not much *** sense after that. you can skip the *** sense if you want that it nothing will change plot of this story.
