Review Detail of Anone in The Two Lives Of Aaron Wade: The Gamer & The Heir
Review detail
I've been fascinated with a lot of literary genres for a long time. At first I wanted to write a story that was a perfect combination of all those genres(or a bad mess). and then my little sister who's also an author here on webnovel challenged. Apparently I can't write a modern world novel even if it kills me, especially one with romance. Well then Chenemi, challenge accepted, but I'll be doing it my way. So here is a book that has romance, virtual reality, organized crime, magic, science fiction, a serious doze of fan fiction, pirates and pirate hunters, sexy models and mature themes, competition, and politics, lots and lots of political and dramatic intrigue. And as usual cheats, really awesome cheats. ........... What else? A smooth slice of life novel with a young father trying to save the world while being connected to both the light and dark sides of two worlds. Plus the tons of girls he gets with. Just swing by and give it a read, and then give me all your votes and reviews.
The Two Lives Of Aaron Wade: The Gamer & The Heir
Anone
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To be honest I’ve not really placed much thought on it, but let's say its like having two different time zones, with the real world being about 4 to six hours ahead. I'm still trying to figure it out, but if You have any suggestions, I'd really appreciate it
squidsquish:What's the ratio of real life to in game here? I'm asking because I find the writing to be very solid but I tend to find VRMMO genre just isn't compelling enough.
Lol no, I very much dislike VRMMO stuff so anything that came out of me is gonna be 9:1 for real life and by the look of it, the game portion is pretty central to this story so 9:1 is definitely a no go. The last thing I wanted to do is to interfere in someone else's writing. Oh just so there is no misunderstanding here, the question wasn't about if time run faster in game than real life, I was asking how much content of the novel is about real life (his business, his family, his wife(wives?)) and how much is about the game itself.
Anone:To be honest I’ve not really placed much thought on it, but let's say its like having two different time zones, with the real world being about 4 to six hours ahead. I'm still trying to figure it out, but if You have any suggestions, I'd really appreciate it
So sorry it took me this long to reply. Let's just say it's a 2:1 ratio between real life and the game, but later on when thing IRL picks up, I'll be placing more emphasis on it.
squidsquish:Lol no, I very much dislike VRMMO stuff so anything that came out of me is gonna be 9:1 for real life and by the look of it, the game portion is pretty central to this story so 9:1 is definitely a no go. The last thing I wanted to do is to interfere in someone else's writing. Oh just so there is no misunderstanding here, the question wasn't about if time run faster in game than real life, I was asking how much content of the novel is about real life (his business, his family, his wife(wives?)) and how much is about the game itself.
MiLfL0VeR:Wazup anone gota read your other book 1st before i start with this one i stockpiled too much chap that it is too many....
Iooooo_Eythere:Thanks for this, I was on the fence about trying it but after reading this, I'm really looking forward to it! Also, love the backstory of your decision to write, it was really hilarious
No it's not, there's only going to be one woman in the end, but there's no telling how many other girls he dates before he finds her. I'm not too keen on that love at first sight thing
ELord:Hey is this harem or not? Please tell me as i don't want to waste my time reading harem novels.
I actually wanted to read this novel sadly you lost me due to some huge mistakes. BTW you have a great writing style sadly due to your lack of research, you kinda killed it for me. Ill list the negative since you already know your strength. 1. Plot predictably. By outlining in the first few chapter's who the enemies are you killed most of the hook for your readers (the chair sceen). I would've made this a huge question mark instead or just a few subtle hints would've been better. 2. You killed the book from the start due to improper company controlling research or should I say lack off. 30% share means your MC is screwed before he even took control. Why cause all he has is majority share with zero control no lawyer can ever help him and he can't do anything at all 😂. Here is where that error in 1 would've been nicely factored in, had you gave him majority share and control but with an unknown inside enemy that would've been way better. Then you would've had more directions to tackle any sceen. Anyways goodluck and you have talent just do more research before you do something next time so you can make things more believable. 30% share with a 45% share on another company that is not even under him is basically saying your screwed from any legal stand point. How might as well sell off all his shares and hire the best assassins money can buy and kill everyone clean. 😂
I actually wanted to read this novel sadly you lost me due to some huge mistakes. BTW you have a great writing style sadly due to your lack of research, you kinda killed it for me. Ill list the negative since you already know your strength. 1. Plot predictably. By outlining in the first few chapter's who the enemies are you killed most of the hook for your readers (the chair sceen). I would've made this a huge question mark instead or just a few subtle hints would've been better. 2. You killed the book from the start due to improper company controlling research or should I say lack off. 30% share means your MC is screwed before he even took control. Why cause all he has is majority share with zero control no lawyer can ever help him and he can't do anything at all 😂. Here is where that error in 1 would've been nicely factored in, had you gave him majority share and control but with an unknown inside enemy that would've been way better. Then you would've had more directions to tackle any sceen. Anyways goodluck and you have talent just do more research before you do something next time so you can make things more believable. 30% share with a 45% share on another company that is not even under him is basically saying your screwed from any legal stand point. How might as well sell off all his shares and hire the best assassins money can buy and kill everyone clean. 😂