Well from what I have read this novel keeps you in the dark most of the time. And I swear the Mc has multiple personalities from the way he acts. He mercies an opponent in an arena and in the exact next paragraph he says that that he will not give mercy as it’s a death game, and again after he says that he tells the opponent to give up. The way the author implements humour is excruciating, he would be threatening someone and the next second he’s getting smacked in the head like a comedy skit. The story progresses pretty fast and the world building lacks considerably compared to it creating situations where a person would be introduced as the relative of your arch enemy, but we don’t know who that arch enemy is. The switch in moods makes it so readers have a hard time imagining the mood and frankly it irritates me. We are not even given the technology level of the world and what we have to do is put bits and pieces together to make up one. there are too many times things just don’t add up, and in the end contradicts eachother.
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LIKENOTE: if having both parents affected by drug will give you a mental disorder, why dosent our Mc have one? Or am I just not up to that part yet.
Who say's he doesn't. You're right about me not letting out too much information about the world and level of technology out as opposed to my other novels. But that's because I chose a different approach this time and decided to expose bits and pieces of it until everything comes together, I didn't expect it to be irritating as you said. Also I feel the humor isn't that bad, and quite frankly it's not a focal point, but put in there as a way the MC deals with tough situations. I'm really sorry if the story has seemed inconsistent so far, I'm really trying my best with this and hoping to make it better than my others. I didn't want to spend lots of chapters dumping info as I quite hate that in novels, so I thought it would be better to just let everything slowly come to light and craft the world properly. But never the less, thanks so much for reading
I get what you’re trying to say and you has a point and it seems the comedy placements in the novel are getting better the more I read unlike the start and the other parts I mentioned about our Mc contradicting himself could be fixed just by wording it differently. And I update my reviews the more I go in the story so hopefully it’s gonna be a nice read.
Thanks so much for giving this a chance
nc author,,other authors usually like a mad bull if criticized,,hahah,i hope u improve mke story better
Thanks for reading
