Not a “professional critic” or anything like that, just a guy who enjoys reading interesting, unique and, sometimes, even cliche stories. Overall, I enjoy the time travel and/or reincarnation trophe. I like the characters and the layers between the real world and the virtual worlds. The main concern I have overall is the introduction of Draco’s background. I thought that it was a big info dump as well as the idea being revealed way too quickly. Obviously, with that info dump done, the plot starts to progress and the motives start to reveal. But I wish that it was introduced more subtlety and revealed better. Thank you for the story though! Although I’ve finished it and there are some rough spots, the writing style and ideas are very enjoyable!
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LIKEI rever you,this novel, and support you on any of your future projects, also this is only my #2 but it is only behind bye 0.02%,the main reason is because the english and grammar were a little lacking but has GREATLY IMPROVED, over time, well this is getting long so I'll get to the point, this is one of the best Novels I've ever read
Kotario:Thank you, and you’re right. I should have done better. I’ve learned from my mistakes though and such a thing probably should not happen again.
I have a question, which chapter it begin to have guild/base/territory building here ?, because I like kingdom building and the novel name attract me to it a bit, bonus if there are some crafting and tech invention ? (since I not clear on the novel setting, but hope they take advanced of knowledge to build some real life tech into this world to help local there). ------------------------------------------------------ p/s: If you need tips and material for some topic, then you can check my thread at royalroad site here named 'Forum And Writing Directory for Authors', here are two example that you can check out:----------------- + A video 'The Rules for Rulers' react by historian (there are more to it but I need to send seperated comment, just know that 'besides money, there is a good number of other valuables which can be distributed by a ruler')---- ----------------------------------------------------------------- + Check this video 'COMIC RELIEF CHARACTERS - Terrible Writing Advice', it show how 'not' to write that topic there, you can check the 'honest thought' version in video description, though mostly in older video since the new one not maded yet
Kotario:Thank you, and you’re right. I should have done better. I’ve learned from my mistakes though and such a thing probably should not happen again.
You dare not admit to it? want me to paste the scenes where drago female breeding slave got fudge in the ace? Of course, I bet you would delete my comment the next moment.. that's why I'll say this.. Do you dare to let my comment be and not hiding/or deleting my comment like what cowardly authors have done out there? I'm curious, are you going to be the cowardly author or be the author that is worthy of your reader coins/and respect? After all, making a fool of your reader by writing a netorare scenes when there isn't one on ur tag is despicable..
Kotario:No
Sure, go ahead.
BloodIess:You dare not admit to it? want me to paste the scenes where drago female breeding slave got fudge in the ace? Of course, I bet you would delete my comment the next moment.. that's why I'll say this.. Do you dare to let my comment be and not hiding/or deleting my comment like what cowardly authors have done out there? I'm curious, are you going to be the cowardly author or be the author that is worthy of your reader coins/and respect? After all, making a fool of your reader by writing a netorare scenes when there isn't one on ur tag is despicable..
That has nothing to do with me chief. I hardly care anymore what others think. I've already developed my core readerbase, so any is anything else is an extra. As for any deletions, its likely from the system. I don't think you're allowed to post chapter content outside of chapters.
BloodIess:No wonder you're so confident, the scenes i pasted disappeared the moment i posted it, well.. can't say I'm surprised.
One more, just because you've developed your core readerbase doesn't mean you can put netorare scenes as you please. You might think that I've just recently read your novels, that I'm extra, but, what would you do if it turned out that I'm one of your so called "core readerbase" that support your novel, voting your novel with my alt powerstones/coins, and reading your "Guild Wars" long before "Darius Supreme" came into existence? After all, I only came to read your novel because of the similarities to Author of Mars Gravity novels Shura Wrath etc. I didn't come to read a novel where the mc is given a green hat.
Kotario:That has nothing to do with me chief. I hardly care anymore what others think. I've already developed my core readerbase, so any is anything else is an extra. As for any deletions, its likely from the system. I don't think you're allowed to post chapter content outside of chapters.
My comment about not caring has to do with random dudes pointing fingers at me saying there's NTR in the novel, when i know there isn't. Google what cheating or NTR means and cross check with what you thought was ntr. You might find yourself surprised. I'm honestly still replying to this because despite being wrong, you have put your case together very maturely and without vitriol.
BloodIess:One more, just because you've developed your core readerbase doesn't mean you can put netorare scenes as you please. You might think that I've just recently read your novels, that I'm extra, but, what would you do if it turned out that I'm one of your so called "core readerbase" that support your novel, voting your novel with my alt powerstones/coins, and reading your "Guild Wars" long before "Darius Supreme" came into existence? After all, I only came to read your novel because of the similarities to Author of Mars Gravity novels Shura Wrath etc. I didn't come to read a novel where the mc is given a green hat.
Can you tell me if the virtual game is reflected in reality or not?
Kotario:My comment about not caring has to do with random dudes pointing fingers at me saying there's NTR in the novel, when i know there isn't. Google what cheating or NTR means and cross check with what you thought was ntr. You might find yourself surprised. I'm honestly still replying to this because despite being wrong, you have put your case together very maturely and without vitriol.