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hxaaa3Lv36yr
2019-03-09 08:37

I was hoping for something good based on the ratings ... alas, chapters 1-3 were pretty bad. Writing quality and language were the biggest issues for me and they made me drop this within 3 chapters. The author jumps between tenses and generally has issues with sentence structure and coherence. It almost feels like something machine-translated at times.

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Rapture_Tales
4.4
678 Chs

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Chenglei
ChengleiLv11

What? Where? Maybe I'm blind, but I can't seem to find any faults with the writing quality, maybe a few typos now and then, but you're making it sound as if it were a grating issue.

5yr
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G_Sucks
G_SucksLv14

bruh reading that few chapters only isnt a review 😂😂.. and 2 star because of grammatical error, wtf?

4yr
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N7NobodyCats
N7NobodyCatsLv1

grammatical errors depending on how often and big they are is a huge issue, if it happens often and u have to sit there trying to figure out what something is supposed to say or mean, then it affects the whole immersion and reading quality. me especially who builds the world in my mind while reading, if i get stuck on words and sentences trying to figure out what something says, im no longer in that world, im at my desk reading on my computer and it affects how i perceive the story. you see it as a tiny problem but its not as small as you think it is.

G_Sucks:bruh reading that few chapters only isnt a review 😂😂.. and 2 star because of grammatical error, wtf?
3yr
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WindMaster
WindMasterLv6

your argument sounds right, however we need to stick with the parameters of the platform we are using to do rating. not what one feels like giving. based on the parameters dealt with by the platform the rating of 2stars is uncalled for, when the reason given is just grammatical issues (which also seems to be not the case)

N7NobodyCats:grammatical errors depending on how often and big they are is a huge issue, if it happens often and u have to sit there trying to figure out what something is supposed to say or mean, then it affects the whole immersion and reading quality. me especially who builds the world in my mind while reading, if i get stuck on words and sentences trying to figure out what something says, im no longer in that world, im at my desk reading on my computer and it affects how i perceive the story. you see it as a tiny problem but its not as small as you think it is.
3yr
1
neil_caballes
neil_caballesLv2

Maybe it wasn't edited yet when he reviewed this novel (2years ago)

3yr
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Rapture_Tales
Rapture_TalesAuthor

As the author... I kind of have to give this a 5 right? Call it biased rating, call it an attempt to increase my own rating. But of course... We all have to believe in our own works. For if we don't take pride in what we do... Why bother doing it?

6yr

BookCat
BookCatLv14

This story has great pacing and writing. Sure, the first 2 chapters were confusing as heck, but everything gets cleared out fast. Not only is the main character great but also the side characters have flavor to them. The world built is rational and diverse which makes it easily accepted and can be immersed in. Emotional scenes were written smartly and not too drawn out. This made it easier to sympathize with the feeling the author probably wanted to convey while not being burnt out at the same time. All in all, a great read. TLDR : Smart writing, Believable characters. 5/5 stars.

4yr
Dillion_L
Dillion_LLv15

Dude I am in love with the world you have created and how complex everything is intertwined. I started this to kill time waiting in a doctors office and was hooked by the time I left. Keep up the amazing work. I'll be eagerly waiting for the next chapter!

4yr
Vistarion
VistarionLv11

The heroes will behave unnaturally. Within a few days, they change from young teens to war veterans with highly unnatural moral principles. The whole plot is strongly forced by the author, for some reason a single man is able to intimidate people to follow him and after a few chapters they are loyal as if they served together all their lives. I no longer mention the complete nonsense of the world technology and justifying the success of the plot armore hero.

5yr
rhcharan
rhcharanLv14

I am a big fan of Second Chance/ Reincarnation genre. I am also a big fan of Modern Day/ Futuristic genre. This is one such story which is a perfect blend of both these genres that is written beautifully. Add antagonists who are clever enough to show extreme subtlety in making their plans work. Simply beautiful! Mind games and philosophical content are and will be expected and whatever is written so far is also beautifully executed and well planned. The MC is strong and has a good mind, but the author ensures that he is not too overpowered and that is another thing which makes this novel even more worth reading. One of the beat works I have read in this site and dear author - You have gained a loyal fan today! :)

5yr
FirstShadowReader
FirstShadowReaderLv4

I rarely post a negative review, but I was really disappointed with this novel. At first, I was very impressed by the MC and his story. I loved the idea that the friends of the MC were more powerful than him in the past and how they are sticking with their friend in the present. However, the author just kept ignoring some logical facts and forcing other *not so* logical philosophical explanations. The following are just 2 points I hated a lot: (1) for God's sake, when u use a chip to enslave a person, the victim will, almost, always be unwilling and vindictive towards the one who did it (this is more so in the case of criminals who are usually selfish) => the victim should rarely feel loyal to ur cause or happy to perform to the best of its ability => a normal enslaved human will always prioritize his freedom and try to sabotage and cause the death of his master in insidious ways; (2) I was not able to stomach the fact that teens are *directly* fighting a protracted guerilla war with veterans => if it was an assassination mission or some small scale battle where the army was tricked, the story would have been still enjoyable (but u rushed the side characters' growth a lot) => in a period less than a month, kids became colonels in an army just like that (and naturally like any good colonel they started killing innocents by the 1000s to spice things up)

5yr
clusoj
clusojLv3

Wooh, i like post apocalyptic genre's and this so far is the best among them. Please update more. OP and smart MC also takes the cake. I would love to read more

6yr
AlexTolo
AlexToloLv6

Reveal spoiler

6yr
Jmitch1
Jmitch1Lv15

I tried. I really did try to read through this. A sci-fi reincarnation story? I really wanted one to add to my library, but this is bad. 1. For the first 3 chapters, there is no explanation. Just full-on action, where you don't know what is going on. Some of the names and terms are used interchangeably, so you can't even keep a consistent track of what you could understand. 2. The story definitely needs an editor. 3. When you finally reach chapter 4, and you figure you'll get something slow paced, it suddenly feels as if the character is overpowered. There is no brakes to it. 4. In almost every sentence of chapter 4, the author uses the character names over and over. Like in a first POV, someone used "I" all the time. It's like the word "he" was limited to 5 a chapter. 5. Overall, it's quite easy to tell the author is a bad writer. There are a lot of mistakes. And I would give him/her the benefit of the doubt if it weren't that they were also a bad storyteller from as far as I could tell at 3.5 chapters in.

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