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nameD007
nameD007Lv55yr
2019-03-09 19:21

Honestly speaking it's super confusing for me....I mean dead man as a main character in your initial arc, who does that?? Dwelling so much in the past stories will pretty much spoil the storyline. If you are going for the tradegy then it's a pretty good start but if you are thinking of comedy then the story won't end well. Anyway the general plot is quite unique so some Marks for that thinking and hope the author writes the story with readers viewpoint.

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Mynovel20
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I totally get where you are coming from and understand why you think this way... But, the idea came to me and I fell in love with it.  I feel like the story is more because of this. Not all stories are linear, so straightforward.  Just like peoples lives are not linear. I still think the story is enjoyable and I hope you give it a chance.

nameD007
nameD007Lv5

Maybe I will wait and see how you end up your novel which seems pretty challenging(from my viewpoint). Well you are doing a pretty nice job and I don't ever want to criticize another's work but reading a summary I had a great expectation, it's a totally new concept and I knew I have to read this novel but as I went along I smell tradegy as the storyline progress and that was totally out of expectation. But I am looking forward to it and best wishes to you author and hopes you end your novel well.👍👍

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Lucasken
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First of all..... Coming to the story.... This is not your regular story with a dominant male lead and a timid, innocent female lead..... And here we have two male leads who are truly caring in their own ways..... Eldest brother Lu Qiang will make you go crazy for him.... He is such a sweet, responsible and patient guy..... In the beginning of the novel... Our female lead Yuyan was trying to get strong and leave her past behind..... Lu Qiang really helped her a lot.... I would say without lu Qiang... Yuyan wouldn't had smiled truly..... But unfortunately this happiness won't last forever and Yuyan becomes alone again.... Really these chapters will make ur heart ache a lot.... Because along with Yuyan we all will fall for Qiang..... And the way author expressed these chapters and also the character development and Yuyans way of trying to survive just for our second male lead who is really young at that time... Lijun.... Is really amazing..... Now Lijun has grown up, made some annoying mistakes but finally realized his love for Yuyan.... So the second love story starts now...... Finally what I want to say is that.... This is really a unique love story..... And there are many side stories too..... And the major point is that everyone is the hero of their own story.... This novel will really hook u up and will make you ride an emotional roller-coaster..... As the second part of the novel is starting now.... Even though I was reading this novel from day one....I am writing this review now.... Because I thought writing the review after the completion of the first part is better....Really going crazy for the second love story..... Thank you author for your amazing work 😘😘

Maliciousempress18
Maliciousempress18Lv13

After reading first two chapter I instantly like it but I wanted to wait and skip to read when it comes back to present to avoid that tragic accident of ML.I started reading it in 500's. Word of advice- Don't skip!You will miss out on amazing episodes and a darling character Lu Qiang. I am reading the skipped chapters now. Story It's a unique concept of two ML's and FL love story , I am glad FL is given plenty time with first ML and their relationship is developed from scratch.This story has everything humor ,romance,steamy scenes and a lot of secrets in the family and of other characters .... there is also one mysterious guy....you get hints... still sometimes truth revealed is different from anticipation ... Writing Author leaves no loopholes. There is so much intrigue throughout the story as the secrets are mentioned not revealed to hook you up. Two events mentioned in the synopsis but you still remain curious as to how it will happen. Considering that first ML will die yet that event is ingeniously  constructed ,so many suspects with different agendas are revealed near it ... makes you wonder whose involved in it even after his death. Also the second marriage , it's a unique but its just as described in the intro... series of unfathomable incidents indeed lead her to marry a kid. Characters They all have twisted side to them ...no pushover over here. My fav's Lu Qiang  - He is the MAN ️! with many admirable qualities .Enjoy your time with him as you WILL miss him. Out of all the novels I read he is a Total Package. Specifically the way he deals with her issue/heals her so sensitively. Yuyan - Cute and vulnerable but don't judge book by its cover.She can be a total BADASS! and scary... Lu Feng- Man with strong heart . Doesn't like being called 'Darling' by certain someone, like Qiang he is admirable and endearing ...you will feel sorry for him sometimes such pure soul. He has a funny relationship with FL' bro Yang. Lu Lijin- He is still a mystery... he's said to be gifted child .. he has shown his talent a couple of times . I am anticipating how he really is as grown up. Zhi Rhou and mystery man -They were introduced in early chapters ,I am looking forward to their story. Updates- Its an original work yet writer is consistent with giving two chapter except her day off.Also very interactive in the comments. I am glad I found this novel!

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