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Kurama_is_tsundere
Kurama_is_tsundereLv66yr
2019-01-03 16:36

One of the best Marvel reincarnation fanfics i have read and trust me when I say this that I have read a lot of them. The story is unique in the sense that the mc created his own company and gadgets and weapons. Though using the radio active spider for a powerup was a bit cliche but the most logical and plausible way. Also a thumbs up for using the Oz serum and improving it. I would recommend that going forward the MC should build an armour auit not like ironman but more form fitting. Try to get the formula for Baddassium from ironman in the Ironman 2 movie. Later on maybe you could teach him magic from the Ancient one. So he could be like Dr. Doom (a combination of magic and science) as both have their advantages. I really liked your novel keep up the great work appreciate it.😁👍

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godfreyngsze
godfreyngszeAuthor

Thank you for your review and feedback. good ideas... actually some of it seems similar to my plan much later for mc future... still thinking for xgene powers... only got few more chapters before i need pick one,

Kurama_is_tsundere
Kurama_is_tsundereLv6

You could make his x gene give the power to harness and control cosmic energy or even astral magic and make him a technomage. Keep up the great work with your novel.

godfreyngsze:Thank you for your review and feedback. good ideas... actually some of it seems similar to my plan much later for mc future... still thinking for xgene powers... only got few more chapters before i need pick one,
godfreyngsze
godfreyngszeAuthor

not too op. how about something similar to kaioken in dragonball but got limits and drawback. need to make future fights interesting i got 10 options but haven't decided yet lol

Kurama_is_tsundere:You could make his x gene give the power to harness and control cosmic energy or even astral magic and make him a technomage. Keep up the great work with your novel.
godfreyngsze
godfreyngszeAuthor

either way thank you for your options. have a great day

Kurama_is_tsundere
Kurama_is_tsundereLv6

Your welcome and wish you have a great day as well.

godfreyngsze:either way thank you for your options. have a great day
Kurama_is_tsundere
Kurama_is_tsundereLv6

Dont make him too op but please give his power some potential for growth so that later on he can fight head to head with thanos's black order if not thanos himself.

godfreyngsze:not too op. how about something similar to kaioken in dragonball but got limits and drawback. need to make future fights interesting i got 10 options but haven't decided yet lol
Kingthor
KingthorLv5

I want to ask something.What the stories based on?i mean movies/comics(if movies what is it spiderman,amazing spiderman or the newest one)

godfreyngsze:either way thank you for your options. have a great day
godfreyngsze
godfreyngszeAuthor

mix of comic and spiderman movie and homecoming

Kingthor:I want to ask something.What the stories based on?i mean movies/comics(if movies what is it spiderman,amazing spiderman or the newest one)
Dragon360
Dragon360Lv13

Thank you for your work🥀, its very adicttive👍

godfreyngsze:Thank you for your review and feedback. good ideas... actually some of it seems similar to my plan much later for mc future... still thinking for xgene powers... only got few more chapters before i need pick one,
BloodStone
BloodStoneLv5

What you just said looks like the novel "The Spider". Look it up.

Kurama_is_tsundere
Kurama_is_tsundereLv6

I have read that fanfic but while in it the MC makes some good decisions he does not use magic but that is not a problem. The problem I had with The Spider was its excessive drama. His girlfriend leaving him, depression etc. He stops improving then for sometime. But does make a comeback so it's good. Just I hated the "over the top" drama part.

BloodStone:What you just said looks like the novel "The Spider". Look it up.
Kurama_is_tsundere
Kurama_is_tsundereLv6

I have read that fanfic but while in it the MC makes some good decisions he does not use magic but that is not a problem. The problem I had with The Spider was its excessive drama. His girlfriend leaving him, depression etc. He stops improving then for sometime. But does make a comeback so it's good. Just I hated the "over the top" drama part.

BloodStone:What you just said looks like the novel "The Spider". Look it up.
BloodStone
BloodStoneLv5

In that I agree with you. I´m not a drama person so ,after his kids appeared from the future, reading it became harder and harder and I eventually stopped, but I liked the rest of the plot where he gots stronger and invents gadjets. If you like marvel fanfictions I recommend " The Merchant of Death ", the MC reincarnated in Tony stark's body and is evil but the plot is interesting.

Kurama_is_tsundere:I have read that fanfic but while in it the MC makes some good decisions he does not use magic but that is not a problem. The problem I had with The Spider was its excessive drama. His girlfriend leaving him, depression etc. He stops improving then for sometime. But does make a comeback so it's good. Just I hated the "over the top" drama part.
Kurama_is_tsundere
Kurama_is_tsundereLv6

I read merchant of death and I really loved it. Manipulative and Intelligent MC are few in fanfics sadly.

BloodStone:In that I agree with you. I´m not a drama person so ,after his kids appeared from the future, reading it became harder and harder and I eventually stopped, but I liked the rest of the plot where he gots stronger and invents gadjets. If you like marvel fanfictions I recommend " The Merchant of Death ", the MC reincarnated in Tony stark's body and is evil but the plot is interesting.
BloodStone
BloodStoneLv5

If you like manipulative and intelligent MC, then you should read " Warlock of Magus World ". It's not a fanfiction, it's a webnovel, but is a very good novel, and the plots and schemes of MC will blow your mind.

Kurama_is_tsundere:I read merchant of death and I really loved it. Manipulative and Intelligent MC are few in fanfics sadly.
TheDemonNazI
TheDemonNazILv4

Hey you said you knew a lot of marvel reincarnation novels... SHOW ME THEM PLEASE IM BEGGING YOU!!!

Kurama_is_tsundere
Kurama_is_tsundereLv6

Well the sad thing is that most of the good ones stopped so their just incomplete but if you really want to you can just Google search 'marvel fanfiction' click on the link for Fanfiction. Net there you can find lots of options even crossovers from Harry Potter to Naruto to DC. If you are interested in this site I recommend to "In Marvel World with Random Power System" also the Online Version of the Marvel World" is pretty good but it's a translation not an original.

TheDemonNazI:Hey you said you knew a lot of marvel reincarnation novels... SHOW ME THEM PLEASE IM BEGGING YOU!!!
Kurama_is_tsundere
Kurama_is_tsundereLv6

These are just some new ones but they have a lot of potential. 1. Living in the Marvel world with Dota System. (I am fan of the game, so I am bit biased). 2. A Hero's Journey( I really love this one and I am putting some of my power stones here). - hope this helped 😁👍

TheDemonNazI:Hey you said you knew a lot of marvel reincarnation novels... SHOW ME THEM PLEASE IM BEGGING YOU!!!
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SuperHippo
SuperHippoLv14

I know this is not the popular opinion but I really don't want this to be a harem. I don't mind multiple girls liking MC, but if the MC decided to go out with multiple girls, it would break the immersion for me. 1. This world has a culture close to the real world and was set in the US. For me, it wouldn't make sense for a polygamous relationship to work while at the same time showing a deeper level of affection the MC should have towards his partner(s). 2. For me, the MC going out with multiple girls would just make the MC a shallow person. (Even if he got the girl(s) blessings to be with another girl, how would the conversation go? Girl 1: I don't mind, I know you're not someone who can be tied down by just one woman. MC: Thank you, I love you so much. Even if the MC say something along this line, at that point, it was established that the MC didn't and wouldn't love the girl as much as she does him. It would be like knowing your MC is not and will not be strong enough to commit the rest of his life to a single woman. For me as a reader it would be equivalent to finding out the MC has reached his limit in power going forward.) But hey, in the end that's just me, I know a lot of readers would prefer harem ending, and truthfully I too like it when multiple women fall in love with MC (as long as it's not just love at first sight for ALL of them.). But in the context of this novel, that might be the limit of my personal tolerance, can't fathom the logic of MC being in a relationship with multiple women (with or without their blessings). I'm sorry if I'm ranting, but this novel had great potential, character and story development wise, so I'm just doing my best in wishing that the MC wouldn't "go out" with multiple women.

Immortal_Peasant
Immortal_PeasantLv13

This is an update after my last review. Given your response I went back into it and just read the rest of the story and I’ll keep my criticisms and positives ******. On the one hand, characterization is still a big issue. Some characters are just given a block of choppy words that settles as a description while some others aren’t mentioned at all. The plot has slightly improved along the way with some obvious efforts to make it more impactful, though I will keep this spoiler free. Some of the changes are enjoyable and make sense. There are a few characters that act very unlike themselves, though this can be explained away with alternate universe shenanigans so it didn’t impact much. However the story continues on with a lot of characters being two dimensional and literally every female that sees the MC falling head over heels for his body. Besides One. There are some issues with pacing, blocks of plot seemingly cut off abruptly with the scene shifting elsewhere. Though it is good for worldbhilsing and developing a readers knowledge on the perspective of other characters the transitions between could use work. There is still an issue with the MC making blind leaps in knowledge for no real reason and being correct, even though it was established at the start he was not super intelligent and never seemingly gained super intelligence. There’s a lack of minor consequences for a fair amount of actions, namely actions that would affect the MC’s relationship with other characters being ignored and never brought up again beyond some few exceptions. The writing definitely needs some work, pacing is all over the place with minor errors or confusing shifts in dialogue. In the future please refrain from having quotation marks separating two sentences said by the character One after the other unless you intend to put descriptive text between. That’s about all I can come up with off the top of my head so on to the other hand. There is a marked improvement in effort regarding the plot and it’s direction. There is also obvious efforts towards character interactions beyond ‘Im the coolest guy ever’ ‘yes you are we’ll do what you say.’ The design choices for characters are at least thought out and use good references for designs so I have no issues there beyond maybe describing them a little more beyond ‘this costume from this version of the character.’ Sorry that there’s a fair bit more criticism, I’m not really good at pointing out positives. Anyway, that’s my review for where I’m up to, chapter 41, and I guess I’ll keep reading it. I’ll do a new review should you stick with it up to chapter 80.

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