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Icezeroz
IcezerozLv56yr
2019-01-05 23:43

Really loving the story so far. Good progression so far, especially for a fanfic as they tend to rely too much on the original for all the storytelling. Although the novel will probably never hit high in the rankings because of the slow updates but I highly recommend it to all TKA fans. Also I love the name unreasonably much for how ****** it is :)

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Icezeroz
IcezerozLv5

How is the word "sim ple" censored o.o

AccursedDream
AccursedDreamLv5

Is there no copy right issue for this?

SinB
SinBAuthor

No, since TKA is a contracted WN of Qidian, as long as I only post it on here, everything should be fine. Also, this was one of the novel recommended during the prompt to write a fan-fic for WN.

AccursedDream:Is there no copy right issue for this?
AccursedDream
AccursedDreamLv5

Ahh thats true and really cool. Congratulations

SinB:No, since TKA is a contracted WN of Qidian, as long as I only post it on here, everything should be fine. Also, this was one of the novel recommended during the prompt to write a fan-fic for WN.
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yaoyueyi
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Objective review below: Alright, so I can't say I can give a super high rating because the story only has three chapters as of right now and little is revealed yet. So, overall score of 3.8 stars. Writing quality = 5 stars. Considerably good for Webnovel standards, although there are still a few mistakes (mostly capitalization) that could be caught with some ****** proofreading. (e.g. ”most of the silver Equipment were developed by Professional Teams.“ Silver here should be capitalized since you capitalized it before and it's the name of the equipment) Stability of Updates = 5 stars. Seems pretty good so far as well; author, please keep it up! :) Story Development = 3 stars. Little to none is revealed about the plot at the moment. This, again, is because of the lack of chapters, but I am sure that as the story progresses, more will be revealed and this will definitely be changed! I'm excited to see the story head in the direction the synopsis implies. Character Design = 3 stars. Again, because of the lack of chapters, there aren't much revealed about our main character, Ha Yerin. Minor characters (e.g. Big Thigh & others) seem to follow a few common character tropes, but that's okay because he seems to be not that important as of right now. World Background = 3 stars. Seems to be the Earth we know with Korea & China. Would like to know more about the game itself (Glory) but I guess since 1) this is a fanfiction & 2) there are still little chapters, not much is revealed. Overall, I see good potential with this story, and it's readable even if you haven't read The King's Avatar (I haven't)! Tip would be to include a scene that catches the reader in a little more in the first chapters; I was somewhat bored by the fact that she was just walking and logging in or whatnot. Perhaps include a flashback at the very start to where she was the Unparalleled Queen and playing the game? Also feel like less all about gaming and more focus on thoughts/emotions could be good for the first few chapters because it does get a little boring just watching them play. I would save in-detail gaming scenes until later on in the story and keep the first few chapters brief with the gaming description. (though, then again, gaming is not my favorite genre, so that could also be why!) Good read all in all though. :))

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