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Jin_Daoran
Jin_DaoranLv104yr
2020-05-03 00:12

I'd like to say that this is the story you read when you want to experience the glory that is TKA again from a different perspective. I certainly enjoyed what there was of this story. The style is similar and the FL Ha Yerin/Xuelian is walking what looks to be the same path as Ye Xiu. Undeniably, the image of these two deities striding side-by-side through Glory is strikingly attractive. I want to see it. I definitely want to read it happening. Not as a romance though, as two people finding someone to understand the pitfalls and exhilaration of playing games as genius/top-players while holding steady to their morals. ...actually that does sound like a romance...can I incline the author to a 'very deep friendship' instead? lol If not, then please treat it as me talking to myself. The character of Ha Xuelian in TQA isn't as defined as Ye Xiu's however, especially since most readers likely came here from TKA. There is a danger of becoming a second lead in her own story if this continues. But it's early days still, and the story is still finding its feet, so I have plenty of hope. I read a lot of fanfic, I don't review many. This is me giving encouragement to a fellow author whose story I think may head in interesting directions.

The Queen's Avatar

SinB
4.4
23 Chs

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Hey all, Author here! This is my fan-fic on the novel The King's Avatar by Butterfly. Although the some names and events are changed throughout the novel, I still hope you would enjoy reading it as much as I enjoy writing! *I'm still in need of a novel for this book, so if any of you are graphic designers, please help me out here! xx. I would greatly appreciate it. (I will also be giving credit) So hope you enjoyed my shameless review! Thanks once and again and enjoy because 'It's a new start.' -Su Muqiu

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Akitsura
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Reveal spoiler

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WENTIAN1O1
WENTIAN1O1Lv5

Will there be romance between the mc and ye xiu? NNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNN

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pokbjh
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UwU it is me super Mario. Dis novel is the best ever Luigi would call it Better than Mamia Mia Pizzaria. The characters are even better than the original Napolitana pizza. If I was so brave as to suggest that the original work is like pasta without any sauce. Mmm it is the Buffalo Mocharela of fanfictions. But you need to remember that the true spice of this novel is the author I Sinb.

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yaoyueyi
yaoyueyiLv5

Objective review below: Alright, so I can't say I can give a super high rating because the story only has three chapters as of right now and little is revealed yet. So, overall score of 3.8 stars. Writing quality = 5 stars. Considerably good for Webnovel standards, although there are still a few mistakes (mostly capitalization) that could be caught with some ****** proofreading. (e.g. ”most of the silver Equipment were developed by Professional Teams.“ Silver here should be capitalized since you capitalized it before and it's the name of the equipment) Stability of Updates = 5 stars. Seems pretty good so far as well; author, please keep it up! :) Story Development = 3 stars. Little to none is revealed about the plot at the moment. This, again, is because of the lack of chapters, but I am sure that as the story progresses, more will be revealed and this will definitely be changed! I'm excited to see the story head in the direction the synopsis implies. Character Design = 3 stars. Again, because of the lack of chapters, there aren't much revealed about our main character, Ha Yerin. Minor characters (e.g. Big Thigh & others) seem to follow a few common character tropes, but that's okay because he seems to be not that important as of right now. World Background = 3 stars. Seems to be the Earth we know with Korea & China. Would like to know more about the game itself (Glory) but I guess since 1) this is a fanfiction & 2) there are still little chapters, not much is revealed. Overall, I see good potential with this story, and it's readable even if you haven't read The King's Avatar (I haven't)! Tip would be to include a scene that catches the reader in a little more in the first chapters; I was somewhat bored by the fact that she was just walking and logging in or whatnot. Perhaps include a flashback at the very start to where she was the Unparalleled Queen and playing the game? Also feel like less all about gaming and more focus on thoughts/emotions could be good for the first few chapters because it does get a little boring just watching them play. I would save in-detail gaming scenes until later on in the story and keep the first few chapters brief with the gaming description. (though, then again, gaming is not my favorite genre, so that could also be why!) Good read all in all though. :))

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midnight_bloom
midnight_bloomLv13

Hi! I'm not really into these kinds of novel but right from the start I already got hooked just by reading the few chapters. I must say it's exciting and informative for a non-gamer like me. Makes me appreciate the gaming world more lol. I think the pacing is just right- it matches the energy that the story requires. Good job, author.

5yr
acikbacon
acikbaconLv5

The story is to fast and I don’t really like yerin to much...I hope there isn’t any romance between yerin and ye xiu. I WANT SU MUCHEN.. but still good luck for your story

5yr
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I hope we get to see how this novel unfolds. plssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssss

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Rasune
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More chapters otherways very good !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! More Chapters! More Chapters! More Chapters!

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