I won't go for a shameless 5 star rating because of my eeny peeny tiny conscience, I am trying my level best so that there are no info dumps and fillers ( because I was one of those who cursed other authors for such things) but it's been quite hard without them, since this is my very first publication I'll give my very best to provide quality content, though for the initial chapters the word content will only range between 1000-1500, but please give me some time so that I can be more confident in my writing skills and can better plan and write those events in the subsequent chappies.I don't care about those constructive or destructive criticism, as long as any mistakes in my writing skills, slang and typos are pointed out, all types of criticism are welcome

It is a good story whith a fresh air , different from most original novels. It has an interesting premise and characters. ....................

Writing Quality - 5 Stars I'm judging based by MY grammar, and my grammar is far worse than his, so a 5 stars. Stability of Updates - 4 stars. It's 4 stars, unless we get 100 chapters in a day :P Story Development - 4 Stars I like the idea behind this novel, I hope we see more in the future. Character Design - 4 stars. I am only at CH.4 So there is a lot more to improve, but I can see the MC's personality take shape even at this chapter. World Background - 5 Stars Not much to speak about it at ch.4, 5 stars. Will EDIT in the future.

I see that this novel has a lot of potential, the plot is well thought out, there is logic behind most actions and situations. Keep up the good work

I thought I wouldn't like this because I Hate Systems (heh heh, geddit?) It's really well written, author just needs to pay more attention to punctuation and the like. The first chap really reminded me of The Malazan Book of the Fallen. Folks, if you have patience for thousand chapter stories on here, give that giant series a try too. Anyway, that's a compliment to the author, because I really love that series. Keep up the epicness!

I like this storys background, characters, and the systems layout. The characters so far have been pretty good (the brat is my favorite so far). The background info for the origins of the sytems is pretty ok.

i don't like how he's being pushed around by a 13 year old girl even though he's supposed to have a strong will and mind especially when he took care of that fake parasite system and met her the chemistry feels little of and i don't think making prakash and li mates in cowardice a comedy duo just ruin the integrity of the story plus i doubt he would react so weakly to having his kill stolen by this little girl and being bossed around by this little ***** who doesn't understand how much more fierce he is and rejecting a system she's most of the reason i hate the novel and also it just feel a little forced for him to be talking so arrogantly about his former job even though he's proud of it her reaction is a little disgusting for saying disgusting also which leads to another point of character consistency theres not a lot of it and even if they do it's mostly just the fucking irritating annoying 180 shift of the character into annoying fucks i mean i was actually pretty interested until you made the ugh as you say loli as a arrogant get's her way always character which annoys the **** out of me and i would say more but it would be more anger frustration and cursing so i raher not when i'm trying to give a proper review

The world building is up to the mark, the story itself is great and written in wonderful way, I also like the description, as I know the grammar is lot better than me, hehe

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